Passes Through Gain - Blitz Colab

50 line poem collaboration with Richard Allen Beevor, Momzilla, Pushkar Prabhat, Sindu, Realmwriter, Jordan, Music Maniac

Yesterday is gone

Yesterday has passed

Passed now unto Today

Passed fast by… moved on

On wings away

on clouds ever out

Out of time, out of mind;

out of place, out of space

space to live life

space to hide and die

Die a million times.

Die infinitely more

More pain to acquire

More blood to be shed

Shed in hate

Shed for dogma

Dogma  true without question

dogma no room for suggestion

Suggestion: just follow

Suggestion: stay hollow

Hollow words, empty talk

hollow halls none shall speak

Speak to me not of hatred yesterday

Speak to me of compassion today

Today, the moon says goodbye

Today, a new sun will rise

Rise to the call of the hope

Rise to the call and be transformed

Transformed our hearts and minds

Transformed all base desires

Desires to persuade the will within

Desires to conquer and prevail

Prevail we must, step by step

Prevail we will, this we pledge

Pledge our arms to the cause

Pledge to keep alive a flame

Flame dancing in beautiful glory

Flame rising hither and high

High hopes in the patriot's heart

High ideals written in blood

Blood shed upon the fields

Blood valiant and true

True to honor and to duty

True to what we knew

Knew of those times and the pain

Knew of all to lose, to gain

Gain! What gain?

Gain an experience, sufficient!

Sufficient

Gain

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[Harmony-Lee]

Very impressed.
Haven't read a piece that's constructed like that before - both powerful and inspiring.
Well done
:-)

[Parimal Pratyush]

Wow! this is beautiful.. :)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Troy Henson]

A great piece indeed from tow tallented Poets.

Well done

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[jennifer little]

keep up the good work I loved this poem had great flow it

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Sanjh]

A great start and a wonderful ending. You guys nailed it. The write flows smoothly.
Thumbs up to you all...:)

[Briana O'Connor]

thanks. this was a lot of fun. :D

[Rana]

A great team work indeed.. Writing this would have so much like playing a game.. It has come out very nice, and feel this would have been quite tough.. Something amazing it is; emanates a sense of togetherness and consequently strenght..

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D It was a lot of fun watching this spin together.

[Tricia Pattinson]

Nice. Uplifting and inspiration write. A bright spot of the day's reading!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D We all had a lot of fun writing this.

[NoelHC]

It is always interesting to write together with others on here, I hadn't seen one with this many on a blitz.
Well done all.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[RAOrourke]

Wow Really cool collaboration! Flowed wonderfully and can't believe how well it all fits together! Congratulations!!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Emily]

I love how you started it!
Well done!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D