Within

Beautiful is the spirit which drifts in the wind

Up on the mountain tops and down by the sea

Beautiful is the soul which dances through the mist

All through the valley and amongst the shore

Man stands before me simple to the eye

But my heart senses his complexity

The depth of the being that lies within

Woman sits in waiting, elegantly timeless

Smiling through the windows that outline her eyes

Leading to the secrets masked by allure

Shallow is the nature of perception

Divided into pieces by exterior poise

Seeing each costume, failing to feel

Neglecting to unmask the inner psyche

Bless-ed am I to have seen through the charade

Meeting each moment as if it were the last

Studying each flaw, surveying each gem

Gifted are the observers of the beyond

For beyond is the love, the reason and the hope

There lies the truth that drives each step

Beautiful is the spirit that drifts with the spirit

Accepting the flaws as perfection at its pique

Beautiful is the soul that dances with the soul

Drowning out criticism with the grace of a dove

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

This poem was brilliant, I loved reading it.

Kaze~

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[NoelHC]

Well done, a good flow to the words, and a positive message.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Prayer like that gives the reader hope of tomorrow, well done, good read.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much

[Dayran]

A wonderful angel-like feel to the poem ... and the eternal nature of the truths it contains ... within. Nice ...

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you so much

[Colton Warr]

So profound! Well done. A deep poem here that will make everyone stop and think. Thank you very much for writing!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you so much

[Christopher Robin]

Briana,

I don't really know how much of this poem has intentional religious connotations or not. Whether it does or doesn't is neither here nor there. This is possibly the best written piece I've seen from you. It has perfect cadence, spot on with a mixture of 'the plain and simple' and allegory. I can see the talent much more clearly here and yet (I'm so sorry there's always an 'and yet') I STILL feel as though this does not showcase your talent in the best possible way. I've seen so many different attempts at different types of poetry from you. I can feel you searching for the correct outlet, I hope you find it soon and the talent can really begin to show, this is definitely a step in the right direction.

Nicely penned,

-Robin

[Rana]

This is so wondrous, so profound, so meaningful.. Was enlightening, reading between lines, perceiving how it says more than it says.. Words ain't suffice to express its beauty.. A masterpiece..!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you so much for your kind words :D

[Malister Mikey]

I love the dove picture it's very beautiful though the beauty of that picture does not compare to the beauty of your words you did a splendid job on here absolutely love it.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Jackson H. Harley]

Love this piece, one of those poems that you read and think "why couldn't I have written that?" :p very thought provoking and in short quite amazing :)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Jackson H. Harley]

Welcome :)

[Ti]

'Beautiful', is the word to describe this poem. I love your metaphors in this piece, and it's pure grace, a very enjoyable read from me. Thank you for writing such a great poem. I'm sure you'll continue to write so talentedly like this in other pieces of your works. :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you so much. You are very kind :D

[Ti]

Your welcome. :)