Within

Beautiful is the spirit which drifts in the wind

Up on the mountain tops and down by the sea

Beautiful is the soul which dances through the mist

All through the valley and amongst the shore

Man stands before me simple to the eye

But my heart senses his complexity

The depth of the being that lies within

Woman sits in waiting, elegantly timeless

Smiling through the windows that outline her eyes

Leading to the secrets masked by allure

Shallow is the nature of perception

Divided into pieces by exterior poise

Seeing each costume, failing to feel

Neglecting to unmask the inner psyche

Bless-ed am I to have seen through the charade

Meeting each moment as if it were the last

Studying each flaw, surveying each gem

Gifted are the observers of the beyond

For beyond is the love, the reason and the hope

There lies the truth that drives each step

Beautiful is the spirit that drifts with the spirit

Accepting the flaws as perfection at its pique

Beautiful is the soul that dances with the soul

Drowning out criticism with the grace of a dove

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and good words.
"Beautiful is the soul that dances with the soul
Drowning out criticism with the grace of a dove"
I like the purpose and the positive tone of the poetry. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Well said.......effectively put!!!
flawless poetry!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you so much :D

[Frontier]

Indeed! We need more spirits like this!

"Man stands before me simple to the eye
But my heart senses his complexity
The depth of the being that lies within" - great stanza!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Tricia Pattinson]

Wow! What a beautiful poem Briana! I love the message and how you've penned it! Well done!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[TL Boehm]

this is a lovely poem - part prayer, part song, and part story. Eloquent and lyrical.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Dark Poet]

I love the words that you use here and I could see this poem just unfolding beautifully. It's so true. This sort of beauty is really what makes living worth it all.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[RAOrourke]

Beautiful is the spirit which drifts in the wind
Up on the mountain tops and down by the sea...loved this line! Your words were beautifully chosen, to create such vivid imagery for the reader. I loved the flow to your poem as well!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you so much :D

[Rocans]

Wow. I am rather impressed with this one Briana. The repetition and the cadence worked well. Your ideas were expressed powerfully and lucidly. I think these lines were very instructive:

"Shallow is the nature of perception
Divided into pieces by exterior poise
Seeing each costume, failing to feel
Neglecting to unmask the inner psyche"

Visual perceptions are mostly illusions masking a more real and substantial reality.

Nicely penned!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you so much for your kind words :D

[Rocans]

My pleasure...

[icelandicblue]

It is wonderful to be able to see through the smoke and mirrors. It is then that we are able to see that which makes life rich and beautiful:

Shallow is the nature of perception
Divided into pieces by exterior poise
Seeing each costume, failing to feel
Neglecting to unmask the inner psyche

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much :D

[ANM]

Lovely poem crafted with aplomb!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D