Mannequin

Cinquain poem for contest

Mannequin

Lifeless Model

Showcasing time’s fad

Lonely, meaningless displayed canvas

Hollow

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[spitballing]

It should be meaningless, but people take fashion way to seriously. A good little reminder to the world you got here.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Rana]

Aha, admirably amazing! I like how brief it is with each word being so meaningful.. Mannequin was a great choice to try this poetic form.. Btw, without the note it was tough to percieve what had been done..

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for reading!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love this....the mannequin to me represents the perfect look that is nearly impossible to attain anyway...
we aren't all models and never will be...we are people with insides that are just as beautiful, if not more, than any outside look.

this reminds me of a poem i taught the past few years ..."Barbie Doll"---

in the casket, she was perfect.

[Briana O'Connor]

Well said! Thank you for reading :D

[Baby Ricochet]

Man that's one depressed mannequin

[Briana O'Connor]

lol I know right

[Mazie]

I think this was a very good 'attempt' at this kind of poetry :) well done, very powerful and very true! it reay speaks of society today... as always, love your writing :)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Mazie]

you're welcome ^_^ and thank you or sharing :)

[Steve L.]

Lonely, meaningless, hollow...time's fad...a perfect description for the new generations way of communication...texting, not TALKING! Very descriptive while staying within the rules.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Ashira Macy]

I haven't tried one of these since middle school, but I would say it was very well done. It is interesting that you see them as lonely, but I can see why you would. If I only existed to showcase clothing I would be lonely too.

[Briana O'Connor]

lol not sure where this poem came from exactly...just kinda rained out my fingers for some reason :p

[ANM]

Good effort a new one on me!!!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Leigh]

Have you created a new format? Its very intriguing and a very different slant on this more unusual subject.

[Briana O'Connor]

no I found it on a contest and decided to try it. don't know where the subject came from...just popped in the noggin. thank you for reading.

[Leigh]

Most welcome

[Harmony-Lee]

Never attempted a Cinquain Poem, seems like a difficult structure to make a statement with so little words.
However, you seem to have done it so well.
Great job :-)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D