Glitter In The Sky

Cascade Poem-Poetic Form

Tonight, the stars are dancing,...

Vibrant across the sky,...

All with glitter in their eyes.

They frolic along freely,

Skipping around the moon...

Tonight, the stars are dancing...

Some hand in hand,

Spinning round and round,...

Vibrant across the sky.

Lighting up the universe

As they play their part well,...

All with glitter in their eyes.

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[spitballing]

Short but nice. Very well done.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Jeannette Lunete]

Such a beautifully penned poem. I imagined it. It was one of the most beautiful constellations that I've ever seen. Well done. :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you so much :D

[Linda alexander]

A beautiful poem, great painting with words, loved it

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you so much :D

[Mayank]

very lucid imagery and this shows your positive perspective to capture things.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much

[Rocans]

When I saw the title, I admit I was excited I would be reading another poem where you describe the night sky in the flamboyant vocabulary I am used to from you. Nevertheless this one was entertaining. An okay poem.

[Briana O'Connor]

This was my first cascade poem so I was more focused on the form than the normal though I put into the words and depth of other pieces. Don't worry I'm sure this will be edited at another time or another cascade will be written with more thought to the poem as opposed to the form. Thank you for reading.

[Rocans]

Okay,I am looking forward to it.

[MomzillaNC]

Lovely, elegant imagery.

NOTE: Your background fill and character color make the copy difficult to read. I copied it into my SimpleText app so I could read it.

[Briana O'Connor]

Ok I shall fix it. Sorry I was bored :D

[MomzillaNC]

I always want to do something different too. The posting system here is very limited.

[Briana O'Connor]

Ya it burst my little colorful bubble lol. But I changed everything that's been commented on. The colors are back to the boring :P and I changed the blitz poems so that no one goes cross eyed while reading them. I would hate to be responsible for someone having to have eye ball surgery :P

[MomzillaNC]

That's much easier to read.

However, if you want color, I recommend choosing a shade of darkish blue which will draw the eye to the blue iridescence in the star field. I chose a blue for my poem "Winter" to evoke the blue shading common when painting shadows on snow.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Quite simple, but powerful in your delivery, well done.

[Avanthika]

good work in simple words

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, the layout reminds me of work from Herta Müller..well done.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[Sindu]

This is amazing. Made me felt like lying under the stars. Thanks to you I learnt about a new form ;)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you for reading :D