Glitter In The Sky

Cascade Poem-Poetic Form

Tonight, the stars are dancing,...

Vibrant across the sky,...

All with glitter in their eyes.

They frolic along freely,

Skipping around the moon...

Tonight, the stars are dancing...

Some hand in hand,

Spinning round and round,...

Vibrant across the sky.

Lighting up the universe

As they play their part well,...

All with glitter in their eyes.

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Wonderful happy poem. I really liked this one.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Tricia Pattinson]

What a cheery poem you've shared. Can you see my smile? Its beaming thanks to you! Well done!

[Briana O'Connor]

so glad to make someone smile :D

[TL Boehm]

stars spinning, frolicking freely, love the movement and the alliteration in this piece. Beautifully penned.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Dayran]

It feels a little like learning Latin ... with the guide forms ... on Logos ... Ethos and Pathos. Poetry with guides on blitz and cascade ... I guess everything starts somewhere. Nice ...

[Rana]

A glittering poem too! Its filled with the magic of the starry night sky, and of the amazing new poetic form you've tried..

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Alfred Kukitz]

Oh Briana may I have this dance?

[Briana O'Connor]

lol thank you for reading :D

[Ashira Macy]

I like how you have been trying out different poetry forms lately, that is a great way to grow as an artist. That is what I did when I wrote my Seven Deadly Sins series and it was challenging, but soooo much fun! This one was really beautiful, I loved the imagery of stars dancing with each other in the sky. Gorgeous.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Woody]

the clear night sky can be a wonderful inspiration and you delivered beautifully. I like this light-hearted poem.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[NoelHC]

A nicely written poem, I liked the rhythm.
One little thing I wonder about:
All with glitter (in) their eyes. ???

[Briana O'Connor]

am I missing something? lol

[NoelHC]

Yeah, the "in" in the last line, that is why I showed it in ( )

[Briana O'Connor]

AAAAAAAAAAAAH I was only looking at the 3rd line lol. My eyeballs are tired. Thank you for having awake ones :D

[realmwriter]

And the stars spy back at us, whispering across the greatest of chasms
What is it that they are looking at? Do they dream? Do they sparkle?


What a lovely write and a fun read. Like dancing to a cosmic tune on the most vast of stages.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[realmwriter]

You're welcome.