Till Death Do We Battle

Inaudible disaster spews from his lips.

They are moving,

But ears are lacking comprehension.

Mind wandering,

Swirling me off to dimensions unknown.

The doctor,

Still blathering his dire prognosis.

I’m dying,

Stricken with a plague irreparable.

I’m crumbling,

Emotional tornado desisting the snivel.

Forefronted ire,

Physician cringing in consternation.

Execration detonating,

“You’re a fabulist, a quack, a rapacious fool!”

He’s tolerant,

All too aware of the turmoil inside.

The sickness,

It’s devouring my heart and soul.

Tears brimming,

Finally falling, hailing down my face.

What hope?

There’s none for this monster.

Clueless healer,

Disillusioned beliefs of sparring with demons.

I’m yielding,

Falling to my knees pleading for an answer.

This malady, it’s there

No matter how vehement my mourning.

I’ll fight,

This battle ahead, this war to be won.

Till the death,

We wrangle to the very bitter dissolution.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[stars are far]

life is the battle and the last stage of death is the final battle we face in our lives. that was well done , very intersting work here .

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[hardeep sabharwal]

An interesting write,, and I agree battle should be till end,, your words are apt and give us a nice poem here

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Rocans]

I like the unyielding fighting spirit of the last five lines. In the sixth to last line "malody"="malady. May be a typo I dont know. I like this poem altogether, very apt in describing the psychology of one mentally afflicted. I think this is one of the best poem's I have seen by you so far. You clearly are a good writer.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much. I fixed my spelling error :D Spelling is not my strong suit :P

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Very interesting write, hearing those types of thing so from the doctors s pretty scary.

Kaze~

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you for reading.

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[Malister Mikey]

Such a hard thing to learn you are stricken with an illness. good write

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[NoelHC]

Whatever the diagnosis, whatever the disease, hearing those words from the doctor is so earth shaking. I will think of these words when I do a road race on Sunday in support of the fight against breast cancer.

[Briana O'Connor]

Very good of you to participate in fights for those stricken by illness. Thank you for reading.

[NoelHC]

I have done a number of 5 and 10 km races and 15 or so half marathons, all in support of various charities. Because the CIBC Run for the Cure focuses on breast cancer survivors, and so many of them, and their families take part, I really connect to that one.

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

It sounds as though the speaker has an ongoing internal battle. Pain is etched within these words

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for reading :D

[B.J]

Wow! i can not criticize your poem. I was so perfectly penned. Incredible work.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D You are very kind

[B.J]

you're welcome

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

If I read this correctly I see it as someone dealing with depression or maybe even dementia. Either way it is well written. Powerful and precise.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you so much. My first draft had the word cancer in it, but after consideration I decided to leave it open for interpretation. That way it would be more relatable. So glad you could find more than intended.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome… I love when people see more than I intended in my words.