The Essence Of Nature

This poem has some of what was originally in the poem Green Beginnings. I took suggestions and deleted parts and added some.

Poppies and callas,

Coralbells and snapdragons,

Blossoming their artistry

For all to delight in.

Honeydew and kiwii,

Apples and watermelon,

Sprouting amidst

The fresh vegetation.

Celery and artichoke,

Broccoli and lettuce,

Growing beneath

Flourishing trees.

Arborvitae and Ash,

Cedar and dogwood,

Surrounding verdant pastures,

Blooming buds of beauty.

Parakeets and hummingbirds,

Quetzals and lapwings,

Motley viridescent shades

Strewn amongst feathered sheath

Raccoons and squirrels,

Possums and mice,

Camouflage in nature

From predators nearby.

Butterflies and moths,

Grasshoppers and beetles,

Fluttering and scurrying

To their own safe-haven.

Geckos and frogs,

Alligators and snakes,

Sparkling, fresh skin

As rind reflects light.

Woodlands of growth,

Prospering its kind

Mysterious in its essence,

A revelling for mankind.

Author's Note

Constructive criticism appreciated.

Reviews

[Malister Mikey]

Good job I really enjoyed this piece you really caught the essence of nature in this piece.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much. This was a lot of fun to write and research. I thought about adding in mythical creatures to add a bit more mystery, but I deleted that part, because I wasn't sure if the audience would approve. What do you think? Do you think it would fit in towards the end of the piece before the final stanza?

[Malister Mikey]

I would find no problem in adding a mythical creature

[Leslie Philibert]

Like both versions, good idea, well put together..

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much