Charging Towards Justice

Formally named "The Color That Enraged Him"

Psyching himself up,

The matador, he readies,

Preparing for showtime,

His fortune and fame.

His outfit, it glimmers

With an essence of arrogance.

Gizmos and gadgets

Arranged to draw attention.

His hat, it’s underlining

With a flaunting air,

Complimenting his costume,

Adding taste to tenacity.

His body, it’s robust,

Agile and strapping.

He flexes and poses,

Feeding off the crowds ado.

His smile, it broadens

Spreading to a sadistic grin.

He holds out his hand

Introducing his guest of honor.

His subject, he enters,

Begrudgingly by force,

Despising its duties,

Longing for the justice he deserves.

The duo, they begin,

As the flag leaves its case.

The wind makes it dance,

And the animal is released.

The bull, it charges,

Running towards the man,

The one that enrages him

With that color in his hand.

His hooves, they trollop,

Stirring up dust in tornado like swirls.

His nose, it twitches,

Flaring from the anger,

Fuming with anticipation.

His eyes, they flicker,

Glaring at the ripple of the flag.

The finish line, it’s nearing,

Forging a malicious smirk.

The bull, he’s ready

with his horns set to brand.

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[realmwriter]

Where can I find the challenges I keep seeing?

[Briana O'Connor]

i sent you an invite

[realmwriter]

Oh thank you.

[realmwriter]

This is not a criticism of your piece but I must say I detest bull fighting. To me it seems unjustly cruel to the bull. That said, I do love this piece, for yuor description is apt indeed.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you veyr much for your review. I too detest animal cruelty in all forms, including those used for entertainment purposes. :D

[realmwriter]

You are most welcome.

[NoelHC]

Nicely portrayed in your words, and I believe this met the conditions of the challenge, as as soon as bullfighting is mentioned, that color automatically comes to mind.

[Briana O'Connor]

lol thank you. I read the challenge and instantly got this idea and went with it! glad it turned out a keeper. Thank you for reading.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Insightful, it's as though you have translated the animal's language into poetry. I could see the bull, feel energy of anticipation.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[MomzillaNC]

If this is Jordan's challenge to the Poetry Challenge group: actually, except for revealing the color as red at the end, it does meet the challenge. It was quite clearly the color red well before you revealed it in the last line. Maybe you could edit that line to something like: "As he readies to demolish with his horn-ed head." Then, it would completely meet the Color challenge.

[Briana O'Connor]

OH I thought that we weren't allowed to make it that obvious. But hey, if you think it meets the challenge I can definitely change the last line. Thank you for the input. Much appreciated.!

[MomzillaNC]

The challenge was to write a poem about color without naming the color. You did that very well. BTW, I note you used my suggestion. Just my opinion, but I think "horn-ed" works better because it makes the reader "hear" the sounds "horn" and "ed" in their imaginings. I just like the poetic flow of "horn-ed," personally.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you for that suggestion. I will change that too. :D Thank you so much for your kind words. I guess I misunderstood the challenge :D

[MomzillaNC]

I think you only misunderstood your own understanding. You penned the answer to the challenge excellently.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[hardeep sabharwal]

really interesting piece here, and flow is well,
I enjoyed reading

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much :D

[Lorem Ipsum]

this is a good poem with a unique premise. But I think you can do more with this idea. I suggest to make the poem wider in contexts

[Briana O'Connor]

How do you mean? Thank you for reading! :D

[Briana O'Connor]

I added in some more detail. What do you think?

[Einstein Noodle]

oh man! i have such empathy for the bull .. i want him to win :( i think your poem is great! as i was reading i was looking for a tie between the red flag (his target) and his red blood .. the implication is there in the first verse but without the pic i am not sure i would see it .. those are my thoughts ;) i read your poem three times and love it .. poor poor bull!
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[Briana O'Connor]

lol thank you for the feedback. I will definitely look through the piece and see what I can come up with.

[Briana O'Connor]

I added in some more detail. What do you think now?

[Mayank]

I think it was too small, you could have used more words and described the scene. There should be a plot, from beginning to end... right from the time they open a gate, dust that rise from ground, the thundering speed of the bull.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for reading

[Briana O'Connor]

I added in some more detail. What do you think now?

[Mayank]

ahhan! this is perfect!! you nailed it.

[R Smith]

Hooray for the bull long may they gore and slash the red and its master to death, its a great poem Briana because it brought back a 'thing' I hate and made me angry enough to applaud death of the matador, its what great poems do, inspire :)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much. I have been prodded to push this further so my hatred of this sport may come out even more when I am able to come up with an idea as to how to expand this piece