My Shovel to Salvation

My Shovel to Salvation

A Poem by Briana O'Connor
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"Pollution Challenge" This challenge is to speak of anti-pollution without using obvious words and taking lines from Momzilla's poem Gaia Swoons.

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Amidst the muck

I carry my shovel,

Wandering the forsaken path

Where passersby shed their filth.

Alone I stand,

Listening as the forests primeval weeps,

As the briny depths heave a sigh of regret.

The nightingale weeps a lonely song,

Wondering why these humans

Defile its land so carelessly.

I promise this bird

And all animals alike,

To search this woodland for all that does not belong.

I’ll use my shovel day in and day out,

Till all is clean,

Sparkling again.

I shout out to the ones that bear a heart.

Come join me in the journey.

Let us make this land pure.

For what is the creatures,

Is also yours.

© 2015 Briana O'Connor


Author's Note

Briana O'Connor
Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

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I agree.
"Come join me in the journey.
Let us make this land pure.
For what is the creatures,
Is also yours."
We need to protect Mother nature. We need her more than she needs us. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


Good write and good use of imagery! You have some real talent here.

-CW

Posted 10 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

10 Years Ago

thank you :D
What a fun challenge.
I like that the focus is more on you and your shovel (hardwork) and not on the evil that caused pollution.
In the penultimate line, should creatures be possessive plural?

Posted 10 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

10 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. I have absolutely no idea. lol Punctuation and spelling are not my strong sui.. read more
C. Rose

10 Years Ago

I'm not positive either :/ Ah well :D
How very skilfully, using the tools of imagery and personification (and a shovel), you evoke concern and beckon humanity to join in the cause. This is real great.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

10 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words :D
We are created by nature, but we have done everything to ruin it. Only if we could follow the path to wipe out the garbage from our head and land.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

10 Years Ago

thank you for reading.
We preserve what we love and treasured the most. Environmental awareness might shed a light that we humans are not the only ones that lives in this planet....

Posted 10 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

10 Years Ago

very true. thank you for reading
It would be wonderful if we could do this wouldn't it? Till all is clean. Sparkling again Yes.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

10 Years Ago

That is would! Thank you for reading :D
I have been guilty of desecrating the land, but it has been many, many years since I have been so careless and stupid. Getting on the Internet was salvation to me. Everything was at your fingertips . . . literally. Where television was supposed to be a wonderful way to educate us the masses, it never worked out. The Internet does what television said they could do, but didn't, in spades. Besides it is a personal thing. We are attached to it by the keyboard and the modem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

10 Years Ago

woohoo computers saving the polluters! what a great campaign slogan :P Thank you for reading!
This one definitely speaks to my unabashed cynicism towards a lot of things...the central theme is the environment but the state of that can be traced directly back to human 'nature,' as ironic a phrase as one is likely to come across...the shovel becomes an almost ominous symbol, given how big one would have to be clean the up the ever-compounding mess we've made over the years, but there's hope in it too...maybe one person is all it takes to get it started, and on that note, I did take this as a hopeful piece in spite of that unabashed cynicism I was mentioning haha Powerful stuff...well-said and well-written :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

10 Years Ago

So glad that my message was able to come through. Writing about something without speaking of that s.. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Always a pleasure my friend :)
Enjoyed your passion! I recalled the dumbs in Vietnam where many Vietnamese gathered for whatever they could find. Poverty is really an obliteration of your poetic sense.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

10 Years Ago

thank you for taking the time to read!

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