The Entity That Binds

"I Can't Say Challenge" This challenge was about describing bricks without using the words brick or block.

Gradient,

Radiant in the light

Of the moon and the sun.

These rectangular cubes,

They form this edifice with perfection.

I run my finger across its surface

Enjoying the texture on my skin:

Deeply red

Contrasting the seal

That binds them.

I gaze at the beauty,

The structure of solidity.

No man can conquer this form

Without machine.

I marvel at this creation,

This bond of homes and buildings,

In which each being relies.

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[redzone]

Don't think I can ever look at bricks as just objects again... yes the line "I run my finger across its surface
Enjoying the texture on my skin: makes this poem special in my opinion. I saw bricks cheering as I read.. "Briana wrote a poem about us" they said. And I say, thanks for sharing.. it's a nice poem

~~redzone

[Briana O'Connor]

lol. what a great perception. I love the concept of anything cheering for me :p

[TL Boehm]

I read the descriptino - thought you did a fine job. Really liked the bit about running your finger across the surface, the texture and "deeply red"
Nicely penned.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much. I surprised myself with this one :D

[R Smith]

Very well done Briana, I think you got this challenge beat, loved it from the first lines, lovely rhyming and expressed the subject easily without actually mentioning br.cks lol

[Briana O'Connor]

lol i surprised myself with this one

[Arrinae]

Very nicely done! Such beautiful words and to find that you're simply describing bricks. It is amazing.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much

[Malister Mikey]

Really job on this one, flows perfectly and paints a vivid image in my head.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much

[Jackson H. Harley]

I love how you can write such an interesting and imaginative poem about something as simple and everyday as a brick, awesome work :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much. When I saw all these brick poems I couldn't imagine myself joining the challenge, but I surprised myself with how easily the words came.

[Jackson H. Harley]

You're welcome, challenge accepted and completed :p