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You have created a charming & quite beautiful ode to spring, great timing;
The wind…
It dances,
Granting kisses
To everyone it passes.
Great visual in every word; you built each stanza so well making me think of what's to come, a new beginning: I gasped when I read the first stanza; seeing the bluebirds. I love it. Thank you. Dale
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
thank you so much for your kind words. So glad you enjoyed it :D
9 Years Ago
You're welcome pretty girl (I Could be your Mother)! It is beautiful Briana.
Spring`s kinda beautiful season that brings loving souls together, & gives `em chance to get danced upon its breeze. Here you give a tribute to spring wonderfully.. through words. Nice imagery!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
thank you so much for your kind words. Nature is truly an inspiration for me.
Welcome.
Yea, Nature`s itself an inspiration, a glory of spirituality, a peace of heart, & o.. read moreWelcome.
Yea, Nature`s itself an inspiration, a glory of spirituality, a peace of heart, & of course, it`s a symphony of freedom itself. I find, most of the writers`re being inspired by Nature, so, if you`re asked, how it inspires you, what would be your answer to this subject?
9 Years Ago
Nature has a certain spirit about it. I look around and there's beauty everywhere. When you take the.. read moreNature has a certain spirit about it. I look around and there's beauty everywhere. When you take the constant blasphemy and confusion of mankind out of the equation and simply look at what was before we arrived there is such slendid peace among us. Words simply come racing at me when I take time to look at the bigger picture of the universe. It is truly a blessing to be able to take myself out of the daily stresses and just look at what happens outside of us humans. And yes I know I'm strange lol
9 Years Ago
Thanks for answering it clearly. Everyone has got their own unique perceptions `bout things, & I lik.. read moreThanks for answering it clearly. Everyone has got their own unique perceptions `bout things, & I like the way you find your inspiration from outta the depth of such things.. related to nature. Keep it up. Ah - No.. you ain`t strange.. but your answer`s kinda 'unique'. Liked it.
First I like birds, second the photo is astonishingly vibrant and beautiful and it complimented the piece .
I like these short simple lines. Somehow you have mastered simplicity in expressing your words through nature.
The wind blows and causes rustles among the leaves sort of kissing and hugging. Its cool breeze cause man and animals to cuddle closer together.
The birds always have a song to sing. If they have bills to pay would they still come up with such a lovely melodious lullabies ?
The crickets playing violins and cicadas playing harmonica . Such an imagination
The children of course would surely appreciate the beauty around them with such humility and gratitude
The rain really refreshes the world . Natures natural sprinkles. You really nailed the last stanza with the season of Spring. I have some few suggestions. You uses the word " dance " twice. On second and last stanza. I'll PM the suggestion to your inbox ....I truly love this piece of yours.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thank you so much for really taking the time to dive into this piece. It really warms my heart when .. read moreThank you so much for really taking the time to dive into this piece. It really warms my heart when people say why something is good or bad. I am so glad you noticed my repetition, because I dislike using the same word more than once in a piece unless the repetition is consistent. Thank you for your time!
Great stuff again...I really enjoy how you take a theme (seasons) and run with it...
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
thank you. sometimes I get an idea for something and try and take it as far as I can. Before I delet.. read morethank you. sometimes I get an idea for something and try and take it as far as I can. Before I deleted all my stuff to look over it I had tons of stuff related to different themes.
Trying to come back to writing! Curious to see who all is still here and what new adventures their are to join!
Creativity is my outlet, and I love learning and growing. Do not hesitate to be honest .. more..