Thieves of the Night

An attempt at a kids poem/nursery rhyme.

Pixies hide amongst the mist,

For none shall know that they exist.

They patiently wait till all is still.

Then they frolic towards the hill,

Burrowing to their underground mill.

A place where their kind can dance quite freely,

And plan adventures quite mischievously.

Above the underground they tread at night,

Always prepared for a sudden flight.

When all is clear they steal gleaming treasures,

Loading their carriage in tremendous measures.

They trollop through the night and then flee away,

Not to be seen in the light of day.

Safe in their haven they pile their score,

Plotting the next day to thieve more and more.

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[Jackson H. Harley]

Love this, there's so much seriousness (if that's even a word) in the world so its nice to read something more innocent and childlike every once in a while :) and this is definitely worthy of nursery rhyme status :)

[Lorem Ipsum]

A very nice poem with perfect choice of words.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much

[Frieda P]

This is adorable, mind if we read it the kiddos today?

[Briana O'Connor]

lol be my guest.

[Frieda P]

Thanks, they love it when the teacher reads them poetry, especially something like this.

[Briana O'Connor]

glad I can contribute :D

[R Smith]

Hey that's great, well worth a place in any child's book of rhyme, at least I know now where my missing socks are :)

[Briana O'Connor]

lol they steal my knickers all the time!

[R Smith]

are you sure that's the pixies lol, there's some odd people about to, guess your to young to know Pink Floyd song Arnold Layne, might find it on youtube if you want to hear it :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Hey now! I happen to be an old woman in a young woman's body, thank you very much! I love Pink Floyd :D

[R Smith]

Fantastic, good to know the young today are old enough to appreciate good music, dance on you crazy diamond of the writers cafe' :D

[Briana O'Connor]

Lmao. I love dancing like no one's watching...at least I hope no one's watching! I've always been into everything that's considered "classic". Although, I just consider it real. The music today is not what I call music and the fashion today is what I got made fun of for wearing in school. lol.

[R Smith]

music is valid from any time, its who's listening I guess, good to know you like us old guys music, you have a wealth of work to listen to, enjoy it :D

[Baby Ricochet]

Not that I'm an authority on kids poem but I'd imagine this would play well with rug rats

[Briana O'Connor]

lmao. i can't picture it, but it's definitely gonna get my brain going for awhile. I'll sit here for hours just trying to picture the rugrats and this poem entwined. Thank you for reading.

[Malister Mikey]

I always liked stories on pixies and fairies which may be odd since I'm a male, but they just appeal to me how can you not just love cute little creatures causing mischief. You did good job on this poem it's really good I could visualize myself in the secret little world of these little creatures. Also love the picture

[Briana O'Connor]

so glad you liked it. this one was fun to write, because i never knew there was a difference between faries and pixies, so I had to do a little research and then make a poem out of it.

[Malister Mikey]

Yeah at first I didn't know that the two were different either till I looked up more into some of the lore and mythologies.

[Jon Roggie]

I like it, although a pixie friend of mine might take offense. I have to come to her defense, she does feed me strawberries, while we wander in a garden under the moon's light.

[Briana O'Connor]

omgosh! you crack me up! That's great! Give your pixie friend my sincerest apologies. It was so wrong of me to generalize. It's just those darn ones in my neighborhood rob me at least once a week, and I just had to let it out man! :P

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That is a cute little piece of writing.. of coarse now you realize you gave away all their secrets, LOL

[Briana O'Connor]

lol what can I say their sneaky night time thieves and I just so happen to be a sneaky people/mythical creature watcher :D

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh so you are a peeping poet? LOL

[Briana O'Connor]

maybe.... :P

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well I will keep my blinds open… call me a poetic exibitionist.

[Briana O'Connor]

lmao. Thank you for supporting the cause!