Thieves of the Night

An attempt at a kids poem/nursery rhyme.

Pixies hide amongst the mist,

For none shall know that they exist.

They patiently wait till all is still.

Then they frolic towards the hill,

Burrowing to their underground mill.

A place where their kind can dance quite freely,

And plan adventures quite mischievously.

Above the underground they tread at night,

Always prepared for a sudden flight.

When all is clear they steal gleaming treasures,

Loading their carriage in tremendous measures.

They trollop through the night and then flee away,

Not to be seen in the light of day.

Safe in their haven they pile their score,

Plotting the next day to thieve more and more.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Savannah Bly]

I like the verb usage. I could really see the poem. The rhyming was nice. It felt and read like children's fairy tale. It can really be something out of the cyber space one day!

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Such a wonderful imagery, and a creative tale. Nicely penned.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy the tale.
"Not to be seen in the light of day.
Safe in their haven they pile their score,
Plotting the next day to thieve more and more."
Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Troy Henson]

Such wonderful imagery. A great piece that flowed well and was fun to read...so much fun in fact I want to go join them on their little night flights

Troy

[Briana O'Connor]

lol be careful. they may rob you when your back is turned

[Ashira Macy]

Love this! Anything with fun little pixie thieves is always a joy to read. I have never tried a nursery rhyme, I think you did really well on this one. It'd be awesome illustrated.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much :D

[realmwriter]

Are you talking about the Pixies from your dryer? Cause I swear I have those too. Little things darting back and forth thought the dark and cloak of night and I swear, I have seen their twinkling light but when I look to be sure. They are gone as quickly as they came. Damn them little nutters. I love this piece. It was fun to read and made me smile.

[Briana O'Connor]

Lol. I know they like to steal my socks so they may live within the depths of my dryer. If I were a bit smaller I would crawl in there and find out, but I'm afraid if I were to try to get in I might not be able to come back out :P

[realmwriter]

You do know pixies have the power to turn you into one of their own. It might be fun to be one of them. Only for a short time though. I think they have been trying to wear my sox. I see really small to prints in them. But then a few come up missing as well so I think they have found some favorites. Little tards can use them as blankets I guess.

[Briana O'Connor]

lmao. Have you seen the show fairly odd parents? There are pixies in that show that give the world a whole new perspective.

[realmwriter]

I think I've caught like one or two episodes. Don't have cable right now.

[Briana O'Connor]

The pixies aren't in every episode, but it puts even more emphasis on the fact that pixies are such a vast species or at least thought to be. There are so many different definitions of pixies that it's quite confusing. I drew my inspiration from that conception and a definition from a mystical creature site describing pixies as tricky little buggers :P

[realmwriter]

That's cool. I'll have to look for it on dvd or somewhere. Maybe catch an episode or two at a friends. And I am sure they are tricky. How else do they get my socks and there are underwear coming up missing too.

[Briana O'Connor]

lol.This video will sum everything up for you :P https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n6ai7Rtn-NA

[realmwriter]

Yeah that summed it up for sure. Cute. I have seen a couple episodes. Didn't catch the pixies. Nice rap though.

[Briana O'Connor]

lol they crack me up

[Alfred Kukitz]

What an intriguing tale! You had me all the way. In fact can you get me an in with them. It sounds like they are having a ball.

[Briana O'Connor]

Lmao. NO! Those little buggers keep stealing my socks!

[Sunya]

I love the flow of the poem, the descriptiveness and obviously the mischief described :p well written :)
-Sunya

[Briana O'Connor]

thank your kind words

[Tricia Pattinson]

Haha I love pixies! Totally enjoyed this poem!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for taking the time to read :D

[NoelHC]

I think I read any earlier version before you decided to rework your writing on here, I can't recall if this changed from the earlier or not. This flowed well.

[Briana O'Connor]

I don't think I really changed much on this one, except the picture. Thank you for reading.