The Madness of Morning

A conversation with my demon

Here she is again,

sitting on my bed.

She stares at me,

menacingly,

a twinkle in her eye.

“She can’t be real”.

I’m muttering to myself...

***

“Yet, here I am, everyday,

All set for your mind and I to vie.

If I’m not real,

If I don’t exist,

Then why not make me go?

***

“I try!”, I cry...

“I beg you every day!

I plead with you to set me free!

I take this bolus...

The healers…

They promised me!

But here your are...

Fixated on my soul!”

***

She crawls across my bed,

Enjoying this charade.

She awakens the voices

That rest inside my head,

And now... The games begin.

***

“Arise, my demons!

It’s time to play.

Our friend right here

Is crumbling, you see...

Let us soothe her mind.”

***

“No, no,” I plead,

“Let's not today.

My heart is weak.

It’s filled with pain.

This game we play…

I can’t endure!

Please let my body rest”

***

I pull out my bottle,

The new pill prescribed

It promised relief

from visions unreal.

I pull off the cap.

I swallow one down.

***

I hear the girl cry.

The voices protest.

The noise is subsiding,

My heart feeling free.

Finally... Sweet reality...

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Even with the 'sweet reality' of the finale, this is incredibly chilling and intense...I take a lot of meds for a lot of different things, so this piece just hit me like a ton of bricks...wow...I could easily imagine this being acted out on a stage...

“Yet, here I am, everyday,

All set for your mind and I to vie.

If I’m not real,

If I don’t exist,

Then why not make me go?

That stanza made me gulp...amazing work...you definitely gripped me with this one :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and giving such positive feedback. I too, suffer from a mental illness and am currently fighting for disability. One thing that helps keep me going is my writing and knowing that some of the most creative people in the world suffered as we do.

[kublakhan27]

I know just how you feel...I was actually just finishing a piece that veers a bit into the same territory...always a pleasure :)

[Steve L.]

Really enjoyed this one...dark and pulling the blanket off of sanity. Great job!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much. i'm good with insanity :P

[Jackson H. Harley]

I love this piece, intense, powerful, and well written, brings back memories of the time when I stopped taking my meds :p great piece :)

[Briana O'Connor]

lol thank you very much

[Frieda P]

I think I prefer your new title, it goes along with that wake-up call of madness, powerful punch here, there's a pill for everything it seems, even when reality bites.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much for taking the time to read

[Malister Mikey]

This is a chilling tale, since I personally have hallucinated in the past this is just that much scary for me. I did enjoy the read, I love the thrill of being scared.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for your positive feedback and taking the time to read.

[Malister Mikey]

You're very welcome

[R Smith]

er! think again mate, are you sure of that reality, who knows maybe the pills are taking you away from reality, maybe you want her a lot.....sit here on this sofa and tell me now what happens if she puts her hands on you haha.....well? Love this one its scary and exciting and the title? I think its great!

[Briana O'Connor]

lol thank you very much.

[Baby Ricochet]

This is a good descriptive piece on mental Illness. The title's fine

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much.

[Alfred Kukitz]

You should think about making a short story with this material. I really like the idea, moreover, the dialogue was lyrical. I worked with the mentally ill as a nurse both in the Veterans Administration and at a state facility. This is good!

[Briana O'Connor]

So do you think this does not work as a poem? Thank you for taking the time to read.

[Alfred Kukitz]

It works fine. You shows skills of writing narrative.

[Briana O'Connor]

Ah okay. Just wanted to make sure. I've tried writing stories before and never get very good feedback on them. I will definitely make a note on the file though as an idea for a story. I always write down ideas for stories, because at some point I would like to be able to do more than just poetry.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I started a program called Morning Book where I would write anything that came to my head. It's a way to get the junk out of the way. I surprised myself with some of the ideas. I did it for 2 1/2 years missing one day.

[Briana O'Connor]

wow that's great commitment right there! I don't have that much of an attention span. I've tried to make myself write everyday, and I can't ever fulfill my resolution :P