The Madness of Morning

A conversation with my demon

Here she is again,

sitting on my bed.

She stares at me,

menacingly,

a twinkle in her eye.

“She can’t be real”.

I’m muttering to myself...

***

“Yet, here I am, everyday,

All set for your mind and I to vie.

If I’m not real,

If I don’t exist,

Then why not make me go?

***

“I try!”, I cry...

“I beg you every day!

I plead with you to set me free!

I take this bolus...

The healers…

They promised me!

But here your are...

Fixated on my soul!”

***

She crawls across my bed,

Enjoying this charade.

She awakens the voices

That rest inside my head,

And now... The games begin.

***

“Arise, my demons!

It’s time to play.

Our friend right here

Is crumbling, you see...

Let us soothe her mind.”

***

“No, no,” I plead,

“Let's not today.

My heart is weak.

It’s filled with pain.

This game we play…

I can’t endure!

Please let my body rest”

***

I pull out my bottle,

The new pill prescribed

It promised relief

from visions unreal.

I pull off the cap.

I swallow one down.

***

I hear the girl cry.

The voices protest.

The noise is subsiding,

My heart feeling free.

Finally... Sweet reality...

Author's Note

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Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Even with the 'sweet reality' of the finale, this is incredibly chilling and intense...I take a lot of meds for a lot of different things, so this piece just hit me like a ton of bricks...wow...I could easily imagine this being acted out on a stage...

“Yet, here I am, everyday,

All set for your mind and I to vie.

If I’m not real,

If I don’t exist,

Then why not make me go?

That stanza made me gulp...amazing work...you definitely gripped me with this one :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and giving such positive feedback. I too, suffer from a mental illness and am currently fighting for disability. One thing that helps keep me going is my writing and knowing that some of the most creative people in the world suffered as we do.

[kublakhan27]

I know just how you feel...I was actually just finishing a piece that veers a bit into the same territory...always a pleasure :)

[Bryan Webb]

My own demon chuckled when we read this.
"Is that how you feel?" It asks me.
The answer is yes for that's what good writing does. It's speaks to you and conveys emotions. It makes you feel for the protagonist and their woes.
In the case of this poem it gave me chills up until that final moment. "Sweet Reality" was just that. The break away from what we know is not real but to someone with that state of mind is it really a break to reality or a facade that masks the cold, hard, reality in favor of a beautiful lie?
This piece was a fun read and made me think. Well done.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

WOW, what a creative poem formed into a story. Nicely penned.

[Coyote Poetry]

A wild story told in the poetry. I like the description and the artwork. Create visions and wild place. I believe was sort of positive ending. The poem brought me in and you held me to the last words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jesse]

I agree with Kubla review quite chilling and entertaining......lots of great form here. Loved it....minus the blood...hahaha.😃

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Addison]

I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. Showing this demon as taunting was, in my opinion, a spot on portrayal. Our demons taunt us, no matter our protests. You captured that anguish perfectly

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Sindu]

That's great.. Few words of each stanza encompass the horror and delusional state so well.. both sides of portrayal. Amazing ending of the real beginning.

This made me smile though.. it reminded me of my first work here.. Horrific reality :)

[Briana O'Connor]

lol thank you for reading :D

[TheLostMind]

I loved the conversation between you and the demon. The first three stanzas are really good.
"Here she is again,
sitting on my bed.
She stares at me,
menacingly,
a twinkle in her eye.

“She can’t be real”.
I’m muttering to myself...
***
“Yet, here I am, everyday,
All set for your mind and I to vie.
If I’m not real,
If I don’t exist,
Then why not make me go?"

At some point in life every person will have to face his / her demons.. Demons that will drive us insane.. demons that will lead us astray.. demons born out of our own insecurities...

A really good write.. :)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[ManasaC]

it's really awesome how you personified the unreal.. I loved it :-)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Avanthika]

a scary morning, i just pray i never have such a dream.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for reading

[Briana O'Connor]

Love the image which brought scary life to the words you have blended on paper to tell the story to those who can't and don't understand..

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D