Sunshine

For My Darling Sunshine who made my life worth living.

You are my sunshine 

you are my light 

Your body is my only shrine

at which i pray at night

You make me so complete

you spark the life in me

With you I can't compete 

you are the love to me

Your presence makes me calm,

your touches make me shiver

With you I'm never down

with you I'll be the seeder

With you I wanna share

the life i have within me

In you I aways stare 

You are my girl to be

Reviews

[JENY]

Wow…
Its great….
You have find your haven..
Lucky…all the best…
Loved the poem…
Its theme…
Sooooooooooo….much…

[G. Anderson]

I liked the rhyme and scheme.
Gage Anderson.

[Mauricio Montoya]

nice..................

[Theresa]

You can really tell how much love and admiration you have for this person. A beautiful piece which I have to admit after reading the first line I almost started to sing the song which actually was a good thing because it set the tone for the rest of the poem. Nicely done.

[Helen Crutchett]

Beautiful! Some lovely stanza's throughout and well done again!

[Allison]

I like this a lot! The only thing I would suggest changing is the 6th line, where you said "you spark the life in me." I didnt really think it rhymed well with the rest of the poem so I would kind of suggest "you're the sparkle in my life."

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Nice. The analogy was very good. I liked it.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

sweet spin on the song~ =)~