God's Sacrifice

This is a poem about modern life teenage sacrifices done all around the world. Please support you children and don't let them to become prisoners of all negative emotions that they feel around you.

I am a prisoner of my emotions

and I can loose all the devotion

It is just a matter of time

Until I don't have even a dime

 

Forget about all material things

forget about all sad emotions

Just have a several drinks

but don't forget to drink with caution

 

Sometimes you think that you're dead

sometimes you feel that you're alive

Please believe in what I said

Please just live you own life

 

Your destiny awaits your soul

your whole body is shaking

Just don't loose your control

or your life would be taken

 

We now take you body for a sacrifice

you will is now bound and broken

Your soul was taken by a surprise

your body is now god's token

 

 

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I don't really think that everyone is a sacrifice because not all people die for the same reason. I liked the message though. I want people to be able to live for long periods of time as well. I don't like seeing little children die either. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Sabbath_Nikole]

"Your body is now god's token" Intersting line prolly one of my favs. A very sad subject to write upon, but it is a good thing your spreading the word in such an eloquent way. Beautifully tragic.

[Aussie]

Brilliant!I'm totally stymied about what else to say...promise I'll get back to you on that once I pickit apart a thousand times over.

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is amazing. The story is powerful. We must look at our life. Decide the right road and celebrate being alive. I like the ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Haeshin]

It sounds really...authoritarian.

[Katie L]

i love this poem it is well written.

[angel gone bad]

that is good

I think that is a really good poem to do with that

[Havatara]

I agree. I do like it, except for the minor errors. There was a great message and I thought you showed it wonderfully. Well done.

[Huggy Bear]

I like this a lot. You did good work:)

[Allison]

This is good, I like how you described things.

[Cassandra D.]

very well written.
i liked reading this.
thanks so much for sharing.