I don't know what this is about. I mainly guess this is about believing in God but he doesn't show when you've put all your faith in him. I just wrote this one night and this is what happened. I hope you like it.
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(You requested me to read this...no idea how long ago, but I'm doing it now :])
I do like this. It's rather simple, which is good. I thought for a moment that you could possibly use more description, but I think that might be too elaborate for the poem itself.
As you've stated, it's obviously about God not being around when you need him. Like abandonment. He's abandoned you in a time of need, and that creates confusion because you've spent your life believing in a being who is meant to be there for his children. I guess it could also show that this is the final straw, and if he's not here now when you need him, how could you possibly rely on him with bigger problems and disasters. It's like your ready to say no as well.
"I've lost who you are," kind of illustrates what I mean, but I guess that line also has another meaning. Someone's left, or changed. The line could possibly have a double meaning. Someone leaving/changing and God not being who you thought he was.
I like the narration, because it does leave you wondering who exactly you're aiming the poem at. Upon reading it, it does sound like there is God and there's someone else. There's someone who has done wrong and taken every ounce of you - yet there's God. Or it could be just God as the subject. Maybe a father? Which then makes it kinda funny because God is the father of Jesus and religion....
(You requested me to read this...no idea how long ago, but I'm doing it now :])
I do like this. It's rather simple, which is good. I thought for a moment that you could possibly use more description, but I think that might be too elaborate for the poem itself.
As you've stated, it's obviously about God not being around when you need him. Like abandonment. He's abandoned you in a time of need, and that creates confusion because you've spent your life believing in a being who is meant to be there for his children. I guess it could also show that this is the final straw, and if he's not here now when you need him, how could you possibly rely on him with bigger problems and disasters. It's like your ready to say no as well.
"I've lost who you are," kind of illustrates what I mean, but I guess that line also has another meaning. Someone's left, or changed. The line could possibly have a double meaning. Someone leaving/changing and God not being who you thought he was.
I like the narration, because it does leave you wondering who exactly you're aiming the poem at. Upon reading it, it does sound like there is God and there's someone else. There's someone who has done wrong and taken every ounce of you - yet there's God. Or it could be just God as the subject. Maybe a father? Which then makes it kinda funny because God is the father of Jesus and religion....
i think this is about God turning his back on you for whatever reason. personally i think almost everyone of us have been down that road before where we think that God no longer cares about us, and we begin to question our faith. i really enjoyed this and believe it was most likely written based on an experience you may have had.
sometimes taking a step without feeling God by your side is the most difficult step to make. But in those instances we must make our step a leap of faith. We have to move forward knowing that God is waiting for us. He didn't leave us behind. He knew where we were going, and went ahead to make the trail safe for us to follow.
I like how he thinks he lost because he can't 'see' god now, I liked how It shows in some sense what will happen if you look deep enough. I like how he thinks that god gave up on him, and thats why he is not able to see him, and not because its his fault. You did a good job Martina.
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sometimes when God wants to draw us closer to him, he puts us through trials. I know it sounds odd, but it's because he loves us that he puts us through them. Because then in the midst of it all we have no where else to go but him. God does show himself in some of the little ways...Ever have friends who stick beside you no matter what...God. God puts them there to show us he cares. God is here, and he cares trust me.
This write could have many different meanings, but it would stun those that are religious and close minded into thinking it is about said target. It could mean exactly what has been read, but at the same time it could mean many other things. I could get several different things from this, which is always very pleasing to have when reading a piece.
I faced the same 'dilemma' like what you've written above. I've always questioned in my prayer, "What talent had God given to me?" - that I once doubted the ability of God. What I can think of through this writing of yours is that, you're not losing the sight of God, nor God to you. I think it is your faith that has stopped you from believing God is there and around. I am not religious, but I do believe the existence of God. People always blame God for not being there when they are in trouble. But has any of the humans has ever offer their truthful gratitude to God when their certain wishes were granted?
Sometimes people think God is disappearing when they need Him. Maybe it is the people who should reflect upon themselves whether they have forgotten God in the first place when they're not in trouble. Do you only need God when you're in trouble? Maybe God does own feelings and emotions too.
What I've said is my opinion and what I have come to understand. Like I've said, I'm not religious, but that doesn't mean I do not qualify to talk about spiritual matter. Your poem is emotional and powerful. Ask yourself whether it is your faith has lost, instead of questioning the disappearance of God.
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