Thank You My Friend

About war and a man who saw Jesus........

 

 

 

All the tears

And all the blood

That was shed on this battle field

Left holes in men’s hearts

A place where they’ll never be filled

A hole filled with guns and shrapnel

A hole filled with sorrow and pain

They can’t sleep at night

With the guns ringing in their ears

Screams of their friends

Screams of unknown men

The dirt and cold wind

Left the men shaken

They’ll never be the same again

The trenches and the bodies

All the bombs and the noise

At anytime one could have died

And amongst the chaos

One man saw

There stood Jesus

Amongst the gore

He looked upon the man

And beckoned him forward

The man took the step and Jesus was gone

The man fell to the ground

And looked upon the sky

A pure white dove flew way up high

And with his final breath he prayed

“Thank you my friend to this very day.”

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Like it? Love it? Review it! I got this from just singing...

Reviews

[emmajoy]

An incredible finish to a very awful scene. You write beautifully, even though the topic is far from beautiful, your words flow like an artist's paint and create a painting almost too dreadful to look at.

I won't insult you by talking about your age but the skill with words you have: whereas your description is extremely vivid, i feel that it's sometimes tempting to select themes that are far more than putting down words; with the words needs to be emotions derived from experiencing or at least partially understanding a situation or whatever.

So, whilst your phrasing is very fine, I find the work lacking in emotion.

Your potential is amazing so I'm going to read more of your posts, in the interim, thank you for sharing this.

[Passingdaze]

An amazing poem. Such vivid imagery...One hell of an ending.

[Encore]

Very moving, a great piece.

Thanks for your submission!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem

[Tallulah]

i liked it....it seemed a little repetitive but the imagery was good and the idea even better...good job.

[Starting Over]

LOVE IT!!!!!

[John McGrael]

its cool!!!, i like it!!, i dunno what else to say...

[Lydia]

I got goosebumps reading this. It was great, beautifully written and I really enjoyed your message. Great write :)

[Amber Nicole]

Suck powerful words you beautifully wove together, while the picture it painted was anything but. This truly is a remarkable poem.

[An owl on the moon]

Powerful spoken, expressed through such vivid imagery that captivates the reader... Your ending, this vision of Jesus, turns us to quite another battlefield in our daily lives... Amazing piece written with a desire for peace.