Needs A Title

A lonely lost girl wandered about,

Wishing to be freed from her pain,

Wishing to become whole again.

In the past she’d been hurt,

In the past there had been pain,

Men pushed her around,

Prevented her from being the girl she wanted to be.

Then one day a light shined through,

A light of pure gold saving her,

Taking her into his wings.

His arms held her safe,

His light blinding her from pain,

Protecting her no matter what.

Her spirit returned,

The hurt thrown away,

No man treating her so sweetly,

Making her feel so loved.

In his arms she can be herself,

He cares for who she is.

She has no fears when he is near,

He’s a dream come true.

Author's Note

I would love it if someone could give me some ideas for a title. I'm never good at coming up with them. Thank you and I hope you enjoyed!

Reviews

[ashley]

I love this... the perfect ending :D Maybe you could call it, "A Dream Come True"?

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

Hmmmmmmm.... Maybe call it "Freed From Pain" or "Hope" or... sorry I did have an other idea but it went walkies, I'll come back later if I remember it or message you or something. But let me know what you think of the titles (I know they're probably rubbish).

Anyway I liked this.

[Emily]

Prince Charming. or Rescued. Or Angel.

You've done very well with this piece. This is the epitome of a story in a poem. You could expand it someday into a story, and give the girl a name, and the rescuer a story. Nice job! I really liked this piece, and hopefully one of the titles will work.

[Daydreamer54]

i liked it.

[la Abeja]

I liked this one a lot, it shows a beautiful contrast between despair and hope, loneliness and secure love. Great write!
As for a title, I was thinking something like . . .
"Pulled from the dark" or . . .
"Let the warm light in"

[melissa]

i love this ! you did great with emotion of it:) maybe call it A lonely lost girl hmmm....

[Sean M. Addams]

i liked this alot of emotion running through and i thought you did a great job on this..i'd call it freed from pain ...