Blind

Third attempt at rhyming. Once again, I'm sure it is sappy.

Every time I see your light being shined,
Your brightness makes me go blind.
Your love for me is just so true
My mind can't quite get over you.
I can't get enough of the love you show,
With each loving word, you make my blood flow.
Love like yours is hard to find,
I just can't keep you out of my mind.

Author's Note

tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Iota]

This one rhymes perfectly! It is okay, to be sappy, trust me I am right there with you in the sappy writing society. The thing is I am glad you are taking the time to bask and enjoy this love you have. So many are quick to find quirks and things that are wrong instead of just enjoying the moment for what it is. Live and Love with out fear.

[Michael X]

beautiful, romantic piece, the rhyme scheme give the intent a sincere devoted effort in execution luna, and the messege has a heartfelt, sentimental draw that speaks of love and innocence, i am sure many-a-readers can appreciate such a well rounded- well written poem.
great job!

[Hopelessly Confused]

I love the rhyme. It's simple and sweet but has a great power.

[TamiViolet]

The rhyme is fine work, Luna. But I am particularly drawn to the message...

[ZaZa]

I thought this small poem was really simple and sweet. I enjoyed it.

[melissa]

like i said its great, dont be so hard on yourself:)

[Alz Alz]

Very cute, i like this poem. Rhyming always keeps a reader's attention, and my attention is hard to keep, so good job keeping MY attention! :D

[Moyo]

That sounds alot better. I really like how it flows. I really can't see anything bad in it since I'm a fan of romance and the romantic.

[deeps]

I think this is wonderful
Wonderful rhyme scheme to it.
very well written!