The ocean and a wreck

Describing the power of the ocean and a wreck

I am the anchor and you are the sea.

I will stay pinned to your bed

and erode with your torture.

These chains will crumble and break,

Under the pressure of your grip.

I am one with the wreck,

that has become my self own mind.

Everything I know will sail away.

Author's Note

My first attempt at poetry. Go easy on me.

Reviews

[The Writer With No Name]

Cool, short and sweet. Love the metaphores and such, great work!

[JC]

Brings about the absoluteness of the sea and what havoc and destruction it can reek as well as some overwhelming insight into oneself. Enjoyed it.

[Arrow]

Thank you, Jason. I agree completely.

[I Am Svetlana]

This was beautiful for just a first attempt! :) You surely have a way with words and how to throw up a good thought process. I guess I love the fact of how one thing depends on the other. The anchor can't stay groundedwiwithout the surrounding sea. Truly magnificent.

[Arrow]

Thank you for saying this! Such a meaningful review. I seriously appreciate this!

[Gabrielle Linch]

"I am the anchor and you are the sea." I love this line so much, it just flows together. And the only way I can describe this poem is by calling it gorgeous. It's dark but in such a beautiful and elegant way. Well done!

[Arrow]

Thank you very much for your kind words :)

[OJ]

I like this, especially the last line

[Arrow]

Thank you :)

[R Smith]

very good first effort, well worth top marks and I hope we see more from you

[Arrow]

Thank you Richard, that was great of you to say.

[мalғy]

I really like the way, you put imagery into it. Kudos for your first one even though you have talent and I would love to see more poetry form you :)

[Arrow]

Thank you so much! That gave me much confidence to write more of this style. :)

[мalғy]

The pleasure is mine, I like short and sweet

[Briana O'Connor]

Very beautiful expression and descriptions. One critique I have is that this phase-"that has become my self own mind." does not quite make sense. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work.

[Arrow]

Thanks! I believe I read it differently in my mind when writing that line, I'll keep that in mind for the future.

[Ruth]

Beautiful! I love the imagery and metaphor...self and power of the ocean, what a combination, the ocean is healing to my soul, enjoyed this...pleased to meet you hon x

[Arrow]

Thank you! I'm glad it spoke to you. Please to meet you. :)