Forever

04/07/12

A burden of thoughts

Drowned in the sand

Lost in a tide

Shunned away

For eternity’s sunrise

Author's Note

Not really sure why I wrote this. But just wrote down what popped into my mind. Your comments are appreciated :))

Reviews

[Aehr]

sometimes it happens that we don't actually know the reason for writing some of our poems, and they turn out to be great. I believe that those poems depict our innermost feelings, of which we don't even know ourselves! But that's my theory... others may have different views regarding this situation... :P

Coming to your poem...

I enjoyed this short, simple and meaningful piece. Really well done. My favourite line was "Lost in Tide..." well done, thank you for sharing this one!

[BlueDreams]

Brilliant Poem it is !! :-)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the desire to lose the thoughts in the sand. The ending left a bit of mystery. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Leslie Philibert]

I like all of Amila`s poetry, and this is a good one too.

[Rhea752]

well i am glad you wrote this. great write!!!!!!!!!!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

My perception of this piece is writer's block, or an inspiring thought that is forgotten, "Lost in the tide"...I can relate to this. Well done.