Last Breath

Last Breath

A Poem by Amila Jay
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death of a lover

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I was held at the will of your last embrace
A
s I grasped on to the memory of your eyes
Looking back at mine; Asking me why
Though you didn't utter a single goodbye
You were close to tears and my heart ached in fear
So I clasped your hands and kissed it with all my might
To take this rose; our symbol of love

And burn it the minute I die

© 2011 Amila Jay


Author's Note

Amila Jay
lemme know your views, thanks:)

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A good write overall. Great reminecance. You have captured the moment very well in this and displayed it for who ever reads this poem. In the few short lines of this poem you have expressed deep emotions of a parting of young love and death. A sentimental rose was a very beautifully dramatic addition to the ending that brings this poem full circle. Line to line it has a harmony and tugs on your hearts strings and for anyone who has ever loved and lost, it is something that is relateable! Great read.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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It made me feel like when my first love told me he loved me but went off with another girl. Our love never died until we do but it still hurts.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is a very nice poem...filled with a sadness that shows the last view of memories...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful and yet poignant. Well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That was simply beautiful I love it!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a bittersweet moment. true love manifests itself at times and in ways that can take your breath away. nice work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow. i dont even know what else to saythatwas amazing expecailly the part bout the rose. C:

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This has a great feel of missing a lover without the regret of lost days. I love concise poems like this. So much can be said in so little a verse. Great Job Amila!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A tragic last breath.. nicely penned!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I think it's beautiful and sad and tragic all at once!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

good one


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on October 17, 2011
Last Updated on October 18, 2011
Tags: teen, young adult, death, romance, love

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Amila Jay
Amila Jay

Kandy, Sri Lanka



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