The Stranger

The Stranger

A Poem by Amila Jay
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A poem about a stranger..

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It was cold outside
With mist on all sides
When a galloping was heard
From the west of the hillside
The wind was howling into the night
He got down from his horse
And forced his way by
There was a small brown cottage
With a dimly lit lamp inside
He knocked on the hard door
With a timid knock
Not hard enough to hear
And waited for sometime
His heavy breath lapsing against life
The dimly lit lamp went off in a while
He thought to himself and went past by
And the stranger went on till early morn
Before he died

© 2011 Amila Jay


Author's Note

Amila Jay
This was the first poem that I wrote when I was in grade 9.....so let me know views...thanks:D

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NICE.......YOU DID A REALLY GREAT JOB AT THAT POINT OF TIME....................I also wrote a poem at 9th grade.......and it was just 10 liner .....this made me remember that...lol........................................................but this is really nice poem ....:-)

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Very nicely done, especially for being in the 9th grade when you're (in some places) just learning poetry. Keep it up!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this piece, very nice write. :)

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such an epic tale in such consise format...starts off so graphically I was moved by the eeriness of the opening phrases... Thanks

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amazing piece! This is brilliantly written in 9th grade. Excellent work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This evokes a scene which cld be from a Thomas Hardy novel. It is all there. Romance, tragedy, death. You were wide awake in grade 9!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What I like to do with old poetry...is try rewriting it. Keep the original...you never want to delete the original...keep the the essence of it near. But with your current writing abilities...see what you can do with it. I see a lot of potential here for you to recreate another masterpiece. :)

Muse

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the poem was amazing and the description blew me away keep it up

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You floored me! and that is not easy. Keep writing. I want to read every word if more is like this on. Full of life and its mystery. You're my kind of writer.
~lovely♥lady♥poet, and spoken word artist!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is fascinating. It has a quality in the depth and uniqueness of the story. The message and theme is well delivered and it is tight as poetic verse. Great job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, i liked how is rhymed in some parts and how its told like asotry. This is pretty good. great write! ^^

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Added on September 5, 2011
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Amila Jay
Amila Jay

Kandy, Sri Lanka



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