Little More Time

Little droplets fell from my face for hours

I would feel her soft gentle touch whip them away

She would sit there next to me never saying a word

She’d wrap her loving arms around me

 

She constantly listened to my unsteady breathing

At night she’d snuggle up next to me and listen to my heart

Tears would fall from her beautiful face seeping through my shirt

I’d rub her back softly hoping she would fall asleep

 

I would stay for hours at night watching her sleep

I’d cry when I realized I wouldn’t be able to do this much longer

I couldn’t understand why this was happening

I loved her more than anything in the whole world

 

She hated seeing me hurting ‘cause of her

She always worried more about me then her own self

She would act like nothing was wrong or happening

I’d put a smile on my face to make her happy

 

As days went by she became more fragile

As days passed she looked less like my baby girl

It grew harder to be in the same room as her

But I couldn’t leave her side, so I’d stay

 

Every day she would try so hard to be like my old baby

She always wanted to be held in my arms

She continued to listen to my breaking heart

As the nights worn on the tears that fell increased

 

Throughout the days she’d always whisper I’m sorry

She tried to be as strong as she could be for me

Whenever I looked at her the tears would begin to form

Whenever I looked at her my heart would break

 

 

 

 

She was supposed to be all mine always and forever

I never thought that forever would end so soon

It was my worst nightmare forming right in front of me

I could never close my eyes long enough to sleep

 

I would watch her chest move up and down

I cherished every single breath she took in

I listened to every one of her heart beats that I could

I took in everything about her in a deep breath

 

Tears started streaming down her face one day

She whispered softly saying I’m sorry and I love you

I didn’t understand what she meant by that

She whispered one last thing to me quietly

 

It’s still hard for me to sleep at night

Images of her fragile body run through my mind

I played the sound of her heart beats constantly

I looked at the pictures of her just to see her smile

 

The stars shine brightly tonight sparkling all across the sky 

I sit on the porch looking up at them shimmering

I replay the last words she said to me telling me to let her go

Now sitting here I wish that I had a little more time…with her

Reviews

[dovetailer]

you, young lady, are wise beyond your years...your writing is so wonderful and you will be able to make such an impact on others with your gift...some of us are exposed to things we should never have to handle at such a young age... we never get a chance to be carefree...we have to grow up fast and be responsible long before we should...sounds like you have been scarred by life, but that just means you're a survivor...each scar is a medal and a story you can tell to teach your children one day that the battle goes to the last one standing...
A wonderful gift...you have something to say and the means to convey it in such a way that you can move others to think...to dream...to tears...

[x]

she continued to listen to my breaking heart...

awesome writing there.

[Omegax45]

This is beyond wonderful. So loving, so sad. It shows alot of emotion from the narrator and one can see how he truly feels without having to second-guess themselves. Very nice.

[Jenny Nelson]

A beautiful and heart wrenching piece..

[Beth Wilcox]

This is absoluetly beautiful, I loved it. It's incredible. You're a fantastic writer.

[Dilan Gray]

This was so sad! It was beautiful and amzing and brought tears to my eyes. This was written wonderfully!

[nono]

Oh if only there was a lilttle more time in the day I could have much much more time for all my sports practicing, school, and writing! If only o well I'll make do with what I'm given. This is wonderful and as people tell me I tell you you are beyond your years haha join the club we're kids, but we're talented! Ah! How they grow up so fast haha :D

[Bee]

So touching, dearest. I mean this from the bottom of my heart. I've just lost someone too, although it's my father (i'm sixteen), and through reading this poem... I'm somewhat.. comforted. Comforted by the idea that love doesn't really end in death, and that letting go would be the best solution of all, but still never forgetting those wonderful memories you had when everything was okay... If you really endured losing someone you love, such a tender age, I'm sorry. My prayers are with you. But overall, good job. Really good job.

[KaySea]

amazing job

[Loveless]

I can relate to this. I've seen someone i love die before me and it broke my heart so much i couldnt cry. This poem reminded me of that with the emotion you put into it.

[Morning Star]

Your words are fill with wisdom
Your writing and style is very unique
This verse is fill with deep emotions so much sadness
Your words captured the pain and sadness of losing a love one
You have truly expressed this painful feelings
Beautifully even though this is a very sad write!!