Little More Time

Little droplets fell from my face for hours

I would feel her soft gentle touch whip them away

She would sit there next to me never saying a word

She’d wrap her loving arms around me

 

She constantly listened to my unsteady breathing

At night she’d snuggle up next to me and listen to my heart

Tears would fall from her beautiful face seeping through my shirt

I’d rub her back softly hoping she would fall asleep

 

I would stay for hours at night watching her sleep

I’d cry when I realized I wouldn’t be able to do this much longer

I couldn’t understand why this was happening

I loved her more than anything in the whole world

 

She hated seeing me hurting ‘cause of her

She always worried more about me then her own self

She would act like nothing was wrong or happening

I’d put a smile on my face to make her happy

 

As days went by she became more fragile

As days passed she looked less like my baby girl

It grew harder to be in the same room as her

But I couldn’t leave her side, so I’d stay

 

Every day she would try so hard to be like my old baby

She always wanted to be held in my arms

She continued to listen to my breaking heart

As the nights worn on the tears that fell increased

 

Throughout the days she’d always whisper I’m sorry

She tried to be as strong as she could be for me

Whenever I looked at her the tears would begin to form

Whenever I looked at her my heart would break

 

 

 

 

She was supposed to be all mine always and forever

I never thought that forever would end so soon

It was my worst nightmare forming right in front of me

I could never close my eyes long enough to sleep

 

I would watch her chest move up and down

I cherished every single breath she took in

I listened to every one of her heart beats that I could

I took in everything about her in a deep breath

 

Tears started streaming down her face one day

She whispered softly saying I’m sorry and I love you

I didn’t understand what she meant by that

She whispered one last thing to me quietly

 

It’s still hard for me to sleep at night

Images of her fragile body run through my mind

I played the sound of her heart beats constantly

I looked at the pictures of her just to see her smile

 

The stars shine brightly tonight sparkling all across the sky 

I sit on the porch looking up at them shimmering

I replay the last words she said to me telling me to let her go

Now sitting here I wish that I had a little more time…with her

Reviews

[dovetailer]

you, young lady, are wise beyond your years...your writing is so wonderful and you will be able to make such an impact on others with your gift...some of us are exposed to things we should never have to handle at such a young age... we never get a chance to be carefree...we have to grow up fast and be responsible long before we should...sounds like you have been scarred by life, but that just means you're a survivor...each scar is a medal and a story you can tell to teach your children one day that the battle goes to the last one standing...
A wonderful gift...you have something to say and the means to convey it in such a way that you can move others to think...to dream...to tears...

[Poetry Girl]

when i 1st read this poem i kinda got a little bit of chills and it made me kinda sad. but ur a good writer and u express your self very well. this is very emotional and i love it. it really does touch my heart. its very deep and just very... i dont know how to describe it but you're very talented.

[Sweets]

I love it!
Very touching, i'll try my best to memorize it!

[Atheana Kylee-S. C.]

this is such a sad poem...

i can feel the emotions written into it...
:')
Great poem

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad and beautiful poem. I sat with my Grandmother for many weeks. Holding on to each moment. I knew when I lost her. There would be no-one to replace her. Your words were written from a sad heart. Today I have a memory of a woman who called me her sweetie and someone who love me for my worst and best. That is what we must hold to. The good times. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I lost my mom a few years ago so this beautifully touching poem really hits home for me... she still is your always and forever as long as you keep the love and knowledge she gave you inside and spread it around.

[DamienHino]

wow! I love this write, very sad I feel the narrator's emotion on every line, depressing to lose a love so early in life

[SimplyDisastrous]

This is so touching! And beautiful. Remarkable, moving piece! (:

[Brad]

this was something bright...shining the glistening night across that wonderful tale you spun...

[Adelia Alighieri]

You used a very fluent style that suited the poem brilliantly. Great going, I enjoyed reading this.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

I like the way this poem flow.
You done a great job using self monologue and yet the story was told well.
From the good time of relationship til the bad time and it's real. Everything you confess sounds utmost real.
Good Job..:) Keep up the good work...:)