I NEED YOU BY MY SIDE - A SONG

An improved version of my song I'll walk again. I've totally manipulated it.

I NEED YOU BY MY SIDE

1st verse. ..

I never thought this would be that hard,
to erase you outta my mind.
It sucks without you babe,
it's draining away my life.
I am breathless so faithless,
I am down against the wall.
Trapped in misery,
I feel so small.

Can't you feel my pain,
I miss you all the time.
I won't believe it's over
I need you by my side.

Chorus. ...

Run your fingers across my skin,
make me feel alive.
I won't believe it's over,
I need you by my side.
Awake me from this haunted sleep,
save me before I die
I need you so badly,
I need you by my side.

2nd verse. ..

Do you remember the first time,
I held you in my hands.
It was a full moon night,
our first kiss, first dance.
And see we were going so perfect,
our love was taking a strong stance.
It could' ve never been ended this way,
if we would' ve given it one more chance.

Can't you feel my pain,
I miss you all the time.
I won't believe it's over
I need you by my side.

Chorus. ..

Run your fingers across my skin,
make me feel alive.
I won't believe it's over
i need you by my side.
Awake me from this haunting dream,
save me before i die.
I need you so badly
I need you by my side.

3rd Verse. ..

Girl,
When you left me in middle of the street,
I cried a river of tears.
My world came crashing down,
I was full of fear.
Can't you feel my pain,
I miss you all the time.
I love you so much,
and I need you by my side.

Chorus. ..

Run your fingers across my skin,
make me feel alive.
I won't believe it's over,
I need you by my side.
Awake me from this haunting dream,
save me before i die.
I need you so badly,
I need you by my side.


Copyright 2015
Written by Armin

Author's Note

I'll love to hear about this one.
Your reviews are always as important.

Reviews

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

I would this is an amazing piece of work. I felt it so deeply. So relatable. Flowy. just had a bit of separation with someone i luv....so..ye to...dil chu gya....although were back... but.. this made my eyes teary...

[armin]

Thankyou so much, i am glad aapko pasand aaya. Thanks for your visit dear.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

"Run your fingers through my face, " - I don't understand this.

"Do you remember the first,
i held you around my hands. " - I don't understand this either is it a typo?

I've left out the grammatical errors as this is a song, however I feel you could dig a little deeper with this piece. It feels very desperate not like you are in love with the person but more that you are displacing your love into that person in a needy way which as a song will only attract young teenagers.

What emotion are you trying to portray?

The fact that I am asking you shows that I did not feel it or understand the true message or feeling that you were expressing, a song must have a unique voice in the lyrics how did this situation personally make you feel once that person was gone?

Some editing is advisable.

[armin]

Hi, Ally run your fingers through my face just means to have a feel of touch. Around my hands details to encircle her around my hands.
Emotions are just so simple, as the title suggests I need her, all i want is her back in my life after we broke up our relation.
But when she left me, i felt her need and hoping for a second chance. The song is just so simple and according to you if the song doesn't attract teens then i am happy i was able to write a bold song.
Thankyou.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

" as a song will only attract young teenagers"

" according to you if the song doesn't attract teens"

You've lost me there a bit too... I think as a writer you could come up with something more poetic or romantic than running fingers through your face the only meaningful analysis I can draw from that is to peel away the face to the true soul inside but it's still a pretty gory image it doesn't suit this particular song which I think is a little softer.

Ask yourself if these sort of lyrics have been done before and what you personally have felt from your experience that others could relate to, this is quite a broad conventional like you say, simple emotion. Not really a broken heart is it? Emotions aren't simple especially not love that one's messy.

[armin]

Do you have any suggestions to replace the first line of the chorus. Do suggest me a good phrase. Thankyou.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Run your fingers across my skin,
Make me feel alive.
I wont believe it's over,
read moreRun your fingers across my skin,
Make me feel alive.
I wont believe it's over,
You're meant to be by my side.
Wake up please open my eyes,
Save me again before i die.
I think I need you,
I need you by my side.

[armin]

Thankyou, i would change it.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Your song just a suggestion hope I helped :)

[armin]

Thanks for making some corrections. Have a good time.

[Terrence Chang]

Nice lyrics Armin. Keep posting.

[Abilash Uttama]

beautiful song, i wish i could listen to it along with music. Nice work!

[Ana B.]

I'm curious about the melody :) A very beautiful love story. Love it! Cheer up my friend - she'll come by your side ;)

[armin]

I hope so :) Thankyou for your lovely review.

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good flow of thoughts. Music is hard. Must flow well and need voice. I liked the feel of the words. A sad song. Had great possibilities. Thank you for sharing the excellent song and words.
Coyote

[armin]

Thankyou John, you've been always kind to me. Thanks for dropping your review.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. I enjoy your work.

[AaronFreitas]

Good work.... keep writing and keep pouring your heart into your work. As long as you stay true to your heart your work is always going to shine!

[armin]

I'll try keep pouring from my heart. Thankyou so much for your kind words.

[Emily]

I love this one!!
Keep it up!!

[armin]

Thankyou Emily, my friend for your review.

[andrew mitchell]

A sad song but such a good write. I love the lyrics "Trapped in misery, I feel so small" Yes the longing ,the desire, the wanting, the helplessness, the love,the heart, the soul crying out, the misery, the feeling of drowning , the loss, to rewind the clock, the need of second chance, the memories that never die but go on and on. Only with time this pain lessens but never forgotten. Been there still there . All captured painfully nice!

[armin]

Thanks Andrew, your review is much appreciated. Thankyou for those kind words.

[andrew mitchell]

Second time around I think its a chicago type song. I like Chicago!

[Jason Yang]

I'm sure the song is as good as it's lyrics :)

[armin]

Thanks Jason for your visit.