Supergirl

A love poem.

SUPERGIRL ....

People play the games of hearts, do
thousand tricks to flirt.
Make fake love then separate,
excuse 'now it's enough'.
But i don't want this all,
a one night stand isn't what
i am looking for.

I wanna be part of your world,
the peace of your heart.
You're my light i am the sun, girl
you're my only one.
I don't care how you look,
i don't care what you talk.
I just want your company forever,
i just wanna be yours.

And when you are in front of me,
my feelings come out naturally.
Girl, when i get you closer,
you act on me, supernaturally.

You are my Supergirl,
matchless in whole universe.
Spark flashes from your eyes,
you're a girl so fine.
And every second of time i am
thinking of you
Mad-e-ly i am falling in love
with you, my Supergirl.

Author's Note

Thankyou so much for your read, suggestions if any?

Reviews

[wordman]

hair of gold eyes of green the most beautiful woman I have never seen
my computer girlfriend nice write my friend

[Jamestown]

I like the fact your not looking for a one night stand, honorable for sure,
love is your desire ! Great piece of work and I pray you indeed get your supergirl!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!!
amazing........
so very sweet.....
beautifully done!!!!
i loved it!!!!
:)

[ANTO]

Armin, apart from a few typos this has all the ingredients for a really contemporary pop love-song. Truly catchy phrases like -
"Girl, when i get you closure,
you act on me, supernaturally. " (closure should be closer here) - are really cool and lyrical.

I could see an upbeat cheeky chappie singing this - like the UKs Ollie Murs or Robbie Williams - that kind of style.
Its all good Armin. I hope you arent disappointed that it read like a song to me instead of a poem - it was just phrases like 'girl so fine' and 'girl you're my only one", I felt put it firmly in lyric-land.

[armin]

Anto, yes you are absolutely correct it's a song. And I am planning to work on recordings from next year with my band 'Faith'. Next year june when i am completing my graduation so I'll be having so much time for doing some musical stuffs. Thankyou for your kind review, do tell me if that writing have some more typos except of that closure i have corrected it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of description.
"You are my supergirl,
matchless in whole universe.
Spark flashes from your eyes, you're
a girl so fine. "
Very nice flow of words making your meaning strong and with purpose. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote