First time

! A poem about first love !

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Street shops were shut down,
we were alone in a place miles away.
A walk under starful sky,
didn't had so much to say.
I knelt down to greet her,
asked for her hand.
I let my eyes linger,
a dance of romance.
The night was like a dream,
I would never forget.
I was in my best suit,
she was in pretty red.
We danced cheek to cheek,
lost in eyes forgetting the world.
That for the first time I experienced heaven,
first time I felt something like love.

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Author's Note

Hope you like it.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and hopeful poem for love. I liked the places and good visions create by your words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[armin]

Thanks John for your kind words.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[stars are far]

"For the first time I touched heaven" that line is so true, when you fall in love you can be able to reach heaven, i dont know how,but i know that when you feel so then you are experiencing something beyond nature and beyond the aura of the human being. I liked that work. well done .

[armin]

Thanks suhad, much appreciated.

[R Smith]

like it, I love it! everything that is romantic and beautiful is written here, just a few lines but telling the whole of love's story, Armin it's perfect :)

[armin]

Thanks Richard always great to see your comments.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Hey, the woman in red...I like red, have written a story about a woman in red. Very good love poem, ARmin. :) Rudi

[armin]

Thanks Rudi, I appreciate your read.

[jo]

Cool poem sweet and short and very romantic. Very good.

[armin]

Thanks Jo .

[jo]

You welcome.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

lovely!!!
sweet and romantic!!!
i loved it...........
:)

[armin]

Thanks Pushkar.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome!!! :) :)

[wordman]

I am jealous armin,getting better and better

[armin]

Thanks ron, I appreciate your read.

[Confuser]

I loved it Armin, it is beautiful. I wish you had sent me a request. Wow. How lovely. Tks.

[armin]

Dale I really sent you a RR maybe couldn't reach you. Thanks for your great comment.

[Confuser]

I will look again now Armin; I promise, nothing is there with your name, unless just now; someone else asked me about a RR; I NEVER got it; I dont' know, but positive when I see your name; I go there! Just wrote something, like a crazy rap; do you know anything about rap? Anyway,,,let me know.

[armin]

I am a big fan of rapping Jayz, eminem are my favourites. I can rap but not in proper flow. You know some people tell me that I can rap as good as I can sing. Just they have adviced to work on proper breathing, I can't rap much fast I have to take a breath from time to time and I have to work on it. But now a days I am not much in music, my exams are approaching in May so I have to crack good scores. I will be back in my music and will re make the band after Joey left it as a drummer. Anyway Dale what you wanted me to tell about rapping tell me if I could help you in anyway. Thanks ,getting out of the writerscafe will be back tomorrow .Thanks.

[Confuser]

Armin: study! you'll do well; I love Jayz and eminem; but am more familiar with the latter; Love Monster w/R - saw Jayz with Beyonce on HBO special and wow. The breathing would be difficult; you can do it if you want, but school first. Thank you. Dale

[MomzillaNC]

Very sweet and touching… a lovely memory penned for the reader to share.

[armin]

Thanks MZ, I appreciate that comment.

[MomzillaNC]

yw :)

[Valentine]

Yes I like it, one question though, was the... knelt down... a proposal or just a greeting? I loved the last two lines, very romantic write. Valentine

[armin]

kathie you can take it any way, a proposal or a greeting. Thanks, I am glad you liked it.