Take care

A revenge song

Baibe,
you were all and all that I had.
Craize, i was
I felt the whole world in my hand.
Angel,
you uplifted my world out of earth.
Faker,
then I found that you cheated girl.
First day
you held me tight.
For a month
it was alright.
But you had plans with other guys.
Your eyes
on their status high.
I was blind in glit of view.
Round curls,
you got me hypnotised.
I was fool,
I fell in love.
Girl, why did you cheat me?
 why ???

Chorus. ....
I gave you my all, my soul,
my heart and everything that I own.
You ripped apart,
tore my heart in pieces.
Girl, you knocked me down.
Now I am feeling heartless chest,
my mind depressed.
I tighten my fist, so take a revenge.
Now,
it's time when i gave you back
with all I had.
So, take care. .......

Author's Note

Inspired by break up songs from Justin timberlake.

Reviews

[MsJewel]

You have captured the pain of a broken heart well in this amazing poem. I would love to hear this set to music. Very well written!

:) Julie

[armin]

Thankyou for your amazing review.

[Jamestown]

Well done, betrayal sucks! Thanks for sharing

[armin]

Thanks for your visit.

[Workvio]

A nicely penned piece on the topic of love betrayed become love lost in the wake of a breaking heart ...

[armin]

Thanksyou so much.

[armin]

Thankyou so much.

[ANTO]

Best revenge is to carry on as if nothing happened Armin - and try to excel in their absence - that really will annoy. Their ego will take a bashing, thinking that you never needed them to begin with.
I liked the sudden twist in the first stanza - "Faker" - wham! - right out of the blue - class!!

[armin]

Thankyou Anto for your visit.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

beautiful poem of love and pain........
i liked it!!!
:)

[armin]

Thanks, much appreciated.

[Afraa]

Justin Timberlake TKO is a great music video. In fact, JT is one of my top favorite singers of all time. I enjoyed reading every word of this, and you definitely came out sounding like him!

Good job!

[armin]

Thanxxiiii

[Ana B.]

must be a beautiful song......totak knock out.....but sometimes what does not kill us, makes as stronger.....bitter yeah, but stronger. Lovely work :)

[armin]

thanks, liked it kelly clarkson stronger.

[Moonie]

I realy like the song lyrics. They feel musical even without any music attached. Powerful poetry! :) :)

[armin]

Thanks Naomi, glad you liked it.

[B.J]

Brilliant words to live by..I liked it

[armin]

thanks for your read.

[B.J]

your most welcome