Love story

A story of a boy and his eternal love.

Once upon a time,
there was a boy.
His name was armin,
not rich as king.
He was leading a lonely life,
no happiness no joy.
He worked in a palace,
handling a Troy.

He used to measure treasure weights,
was faithful to his duty.
Music was his passion,
and was a big foodie.
And after some days,
he fell in love.
Girl of his dreams,
princess of the same kingdom.

She was made of Gold,
had beauty and fame.
Strong as titanium,
Taylor was her name.
Now overcoming his fear,
armin ran towards her.
Breaking his silence,
said 'I love you' my dear.

She kept standing still,
and was surprised listening to that.
But she offered him a deal,
you have to impress my dad.
you'll have to stand on his behalf,
fight like a warrior.
Have to win a war,
then you'll be my dearer.

Armin commanded in loud,
my love is truly abound.
Am all ready to give my best,
my love is muchly blessed.
Playing on my life,
I'll defeat every opponent.
Will strive till I last,
making you all important.

The sun has risen in its own glory,
birds were flying so blissfully.
Armin was about to take on the battlefield,
and God was blessing his victory.
He fought bravely like Tiger,
leading the army.
Winning at the end,
he praised his destiny.

He shouted joyfully,
celebrating his great victory.
'Armin armin' all around,
he really created a history.
This was a happy end,
Armin got his fairy.
Taylor found her charming prince,
this was simply my 'Love Story'.

Author's Note

Please tell me this one. This is really close to my heart.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of description.
"The sun has risen in its own glory,
birds were flying so blissfully.
Armin was about to take on the battlefield,
and God was blessing his victory.
He fought bravely like Tiger,
leading the army.
Winning at the end,
he praised his destiny. "
The above lines could stand alone. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[armin]

Oh ,you are so kind sir. Thanks for your comment.

[armin]

I really appreciate you coming to read this one. That was a small dedication to taylor swift.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Workvio]

There's nothing to compare with a good love story with a happy ending ... Sadly, life is not always so gracious to us each, but I am pleased to see that it worked well for your two lovers ...

[Ana B.]

Woah, quite a story here. Lovely and sweet and romantic......yay to the Love Stories and all the happy endings!

[armin]

Thanxiiii.....

[jo]

Its good very beautiful and very cute and very romantic
Jo.

[armin]

Thankyou Jo, have a nice time.

[Shane Mohamed]

Sounds like a fairy tale; that's a good thing, that you've approached that effect. Everybody likes a happy ending. Personally, not my style of writing, but I like reading it. It read smoothly. I honestly enjoyed it. You need some tweaking in your language and grammar though. Awesome job.

[armin]

Thank you so much shane for your visit.

[R Smith]

interesting love story Armin, you made a drama and a fantasy of your love and turned it into a huge poem of some quality, well done :)

[armin]

yes Richard tried to make it like a nice tale. Thanks for your kind review.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Ow! evreyline where i found sweet love prevailed ..u made it look like a fairy tale ! very nice hope every girl gets a prince like u armin : )

[armin]

Thanks, lenah so sweat of you.

[Moonie]

Amazing metaphor, first of all! Yep, love is a battle. I really like this love story. My only suggestion would be to change the last line of the 4th stanza, as that line sounds a little forced. Maybe try "Then we'll make it through, my dear".. this is just a suggestion, and the decision of course is yours! :) :)

[armin]

Naomi, I used the word 'dear' in third stanza so I can't repeat it in the fourth one. Second reason is that the tale is rhyming alternate lines, so dearer will rhyme the word warrior. Third reason is so simple she offered him to fight a war and if he wins it, he will be her dearer much more than dear.
Your line "Then we'll make it through,
my dear" is also good either. But before the war she can't greet him saying 'my dear' ,he was not her dear before the battle held. Thanks.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

an interesting piece....reminds me of how emily dickinson had fantasy lovers and wrote poems about and to them. and i also like the respectfulness of the admiration.

jacob

[armin]

Thanks Jacob.

[Laura Lynn]

there is much respect for the above generation here, which is a relief, though it's a complex balancing act, our elders we respect sure

[armin]

Laura ,what are you talking about, you reviewed the poem Love story and you saying of respect, generation. Could you enlighten your review please.

[Laura Lynn]

"she offered him a deal,/you have to impress my dad." I hadn't thought of that, that's a great idea, though I guess at certain points we think of that, but this is a more appropriate time, in the story, where the character first puts that up right away as the challenge, though every father different

[armin]

now got it, thanks Laura you liked the idea. I appreciate your read and comments.