Unexpected IV

'I'll take up your offer,' I announced to the stationmaster.
You know how they say when life gives you lemons make lemonade. Well, here was another chance for me to go to Carney.  If the wedding was being postponed, I decided I would make the most of it. I mean, if I already was travelling across the grand United States of America, I might as well take advantage of it, right? I didn't know when I'd get the chance to go on such a trip again and who knew? maybe I'll find my inner charisma or something. I smirked at that thought.
'Okay, hold on a sec,' Mr. Brandon the station master replied.
He dialed someone's number and started talking. Meanwhile, I looked around. His office was very casual: a filing cabinet, a few shelves behind his straight front desk.
'Today's your lucky day, Alexandra' he told me, which brought my attention back to him.
'Yeah? Why is that?'
'Because there is a bus that leaves for Arkansas tomorrow. You can pick one of the two routes; either Tennessee or Missouri, once you get there.'
'Okay, and then what?'
'Then you go your own way. There are only two seats left, you can take a friend of yours if you want, but you'll have to tell me now.'
Knowing that I would not get a better chance, I agreed.
'The bus leaves sharp at six. Remember if you're late again, I won't be able to help you,' he replied, laughing.
I grinned.
'Don't worry, you won't have to,' I replied and walked out of his office.
         When I came out, blue-eyed guy was still there. I rolled my eyes. Either that guy is a stalker or he is seriously bored to death and has nothing better to do. I picked up my bag and started walking outside, towards my car. I decided I would rest for a while at home, and then I would call Lexie. A lot of work needed to be done: packing more durable clothes, unpacking the "fancy frilly" ones, deciding on the route, and so on. But the very first thing that I would do I decided, as I started my car, was that I would charge my mobile.
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       The first thing I did when I reached my two-bedroom apartment was charge my mobile. Then I plopped onto the sofa and grabbed the cordless phone. I dialed Lexie's number; I knew it by heart. Lexie is my childhood best friend. We've been best friends ever since she punched Dave for stealing my lunch box in grade one.
'Hi Lex.'
'Hey, Alex, how come you're calling from your house number?'
'Long story. In short, I missed the train and had a change of plans.'
'No kidding, seriously?'
'Yeah. Any way, are you up for a trip?'
'Where to?'
'I'll tell you when you come here.'
‘And when will that be' she asked, confused.
'In fifteen minutes,' I replied in my most serious tone.
'But I'm not even ready yet,' she replied, laughing.
'I don't care. This is important, so hurry up'
'Okay, fine, give me twenty minutes and I'll be there,' Lexie replied, and with that she hung up the phone.
           I got up and started searching for online maps, and that was when I suddenly got an idea. It was the perfect plan, and it was just what I needed. I closed my laptop and went in my room, towards my closet. I opened it, searching for my hiking gear. This is going to be an exciting trip I thought.

[To be continued]

PS: for those who are wondering, this is not the fourth chapter but the continuation of the previous one

Reviews

[Anna]

So I think that overall this is a great start. I think that you could probably add a bit more detail. I was confused though, you suddenly dropped the urgency for her to get to the wedding. but yet she is in a hurry to leave. I think what might help is to give the reader a bit more of the feeling that she can take this unexpected adventure, like it is something she has always wanted to do hike across america or something of that nature that you have hinted at but didnt really show us. There is a lot of telling and not enough showing. why does she want to do it. Your descriptions are very simple and I think you could amp them up a bit. I think it is definitely a good start, I really liked the mysterious guy, I hope he appears again, simply because I want to know who he is. Take it as you will. Good work, good luck :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I love your concept, a fever of raw emotion and intake that grabs a reader, fully. I would add as much descriptive detail as possible though, well done.

[trainwreck]

More details! I can't wait to read more, but I would really love so more depth. This is a good story.

[Erinne S.]

Another great chapter and your story is really starting to pick up now! I do have one question about this chapter though...how does Alex know the station master's name and how does he know hers? Unless the met each other previously. Just a random question I had. Anyway I like this chapter and I'm looking forward to more once you get it written.

~Erinne

[mroz]

It's going well so far. Alex is a charming young lady, and so are the other characters you have going on. Very nice way of opening up the plot by allowing her a road trip. There are a few grammar problems here and there, but it was a pleasant reading experience, and I hope that you continue writing!

[Mikel]

Now the story is starting to roll. don't drop the blue-eyes storyline though. He has a lot of potential as a character either as a hero or a threat. It'll be interesting to see where you take this.

[Jim Parson]

Seriously, I'm having a REALLY hard time reading the pink print.

Okay, the plot is starting to pick up now. I'm excited for the trip and still wondering about the diary! I was fooled a bit, too. I thought the second passenger would be blue-eyes.

[Arsenic Nemesis]

Really good, interesting - though the pink writing is a bit blinding, but that's just me; I'll brave through! XD Nice job, keep it up!~