The Ring

The Ring, a relic of our love...

Last night she gave me the ring-
that bore our names,
A reminiscent of the love we once shared,
A shiny ring.

O' dear, why give me back?
Keep it in the deepest pocket of your bag,
or among the last pages of your scrapbook.
But why give me back?

I can't hold it's weight,
cause there's a part of my soul inside-
that I rip apart for you.
A part still craving for your love.

I will dig so deep for this relic,
no nomads can ever find.
I will burn it till it glows,
till the heat of our love melt it.

I will bury it among the woods,
cause love can only be buried among love.
I will give it to nature,
for there's not a better lover than her.

O' dear, you know I can't keep it,
Time must rust it out.
Like our love that once shined,
but left a cold piece of charcoal.

Reviews

[Anjali]

Love is such a purest form of feeling, the artists paint with colours, while the writers with words. Yet nobody could ever describe it completely as it differs for every other individual out there.

[Jade]

This is a touching write here, I really enjoyed reading this

[APN]

Wow! Touching . whoever she is , I wonder how would someone ignore these kind of love .

[The ArK]

Thank you my friend.

[Abhishek Izy]

This is a powerful piece of emotion, my friend. I really connected to the emotions behind it. You portrayed what's in your head so very well. Brilliant piece.

[The ArK]

Thank You!

[Chris Shaw]

Returned rings seem to be the ultimate put down to me. I also think, the person it was gifted to should have kept it as a sign of what was once good in the relationship. Breakups are painful, giving rings back just comes across as trying to erase everything. You can't do that. I enjoyed your poem Ark.

Chris

[peter Duggan]

Hey Ark, this was truly a nice write, my friend. Really good the way you expressed your feelings I enjoyed the the read...Peter

[The ArK]

Thank you, peter.

[Weeping willow]

Wonderful write, thanks for sharing ;-]

[Leslie Philibert]

Fine poem, that has all the hallmarks of classical poetry, with 'O and the subject. Well done.

[Riddhi]

I liked the poem...And the way you expressed your feelings..I loved the third stanza when you said I can't hold its weight cause there is a part of my soul inside...And yes , I agree with you there is no better lover than nature...Loved it...Great work..Keep on writing..

[The ArK]

Thank you Riddhi!

[Riddhi]

You're welcome..