INDEPENDENCE DAY

This poem is an autobiographical note of a boy who one day realizes that his mind was in a struggle between good and bad for a very long time.

INDEPENDENCE DAY

One day in my life

I felt I am not alone.

Someone was with me

all the time.

But I didn't bother to know

who it was.

It was a spirit that

always came with me,

Travelled with me,

Played with me.

It assisted me in my sleep,

in my study, on my play time.

It made my path clear.

Deviating me from

the way of challenges.

It made change

in my personality.

It was the spirit who

made my life easy.

But slowly I realized that

the spirit was no good for me.

It was he who made me

bad to worse.

It didn't let me

face the challenges.

It took away the opportunities

that were in front of me.

It never allowed me to win.

It took me from the

world of light and

blinded me with its black veil.

Made me a living statue!

It took very much time to

realize that the spirit was myself

It was within me,

was a part of me.

It was me who defeated

myself!!!

Now I know the dark side

is growing bigger to biggest.

But I must not allow.

I have to fight and I will.

I have to lighten the

dark side of me.

Don't let the dark part

overtake you.

It will be your end and

you will be no more.

One day I will

overtake my dark side.

And that day will be my

Independence Day!!!!!

**************

Author's Note

I'm just a beginner. So there will be a vast area of grammar mistakes. But criticism will help me to improve. Constructive criticism are always welcome.

Reviews

[Mirra]

There is always that dark side of us, that little devil in our minds dictating and luring us to do the wrong. You are talented, been trying to write a poem with the same message but I can't pull out the true message of it. This is well-penned! One great piece worth shelving.

[The ArK]

Thanx..............

[Mirra]

Welcome ^_^!

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'INDEPENDENCE DAY'
ArK,
A side of shadow, a side of light. The contrast is where you are focused. Contrast is really important as this theme is seen all through life. I have struggled with difficulties and been exultant in hope. Even in stretches of cloudiness the hope can be singing. Questions and open emotion that admits we are not all powerful but needy too is a good place to start.
Blessings,
Kathy

[The ArK]

This may be my first poem I shared on writerscafe. Now when I read it, I can see the flaws in my style. I hope I have improved over time.
Kathy, thanks for finding time to read and appreciate my work. Thanks for taking me 4 years back.

Love, ArK

[Kathy Van Kurin]

It was meaningful at the time and we build on what comes before.

[Brittany Zedalis]

╰☆╮Though this may not be how you intended it, from my personal experiences this made me think of someone fighting depression. Regardless, very good job.╰☆╮

[Ruth]

We all have both a dark and light side, it is the loving, unconditional heart that always wins though...great poem :) x

[The ArK]

Thank u poppy :) :)
By the way I do not agree with u... It's not our heart, it's our brain(or mind) that wins always.....;)
Biologically Heart is only an organ that can pump blood through our blood vessels..... :D

[Ruth]

We will agree to differ there :) You are welcome for the review...

[Penny]

Frankly I love the dark side and though it doesn't rhyme but it has something that keeps the interest retained. Very well done.

[Ayushi]

"It was me who defeated
myself!!"
Great line and great message.
We are the creators of our own destiny .. Well written .

[Vidya Bacchus]

Everyone of us has a dark side to us.It is up to us if we choose to let the darkness drag us down .Very good ARK :)

[Glass Heart Inc]

Very interesting turn of events that the spirit turned out to be your dark side that you had to defeat. This is a great poem and I can see you put a lot of thought into it. :)

[MoriartyMesa]

Speaking as someone with Mayan and Kelt blood. This made me reflect on my own line and I think that to make a reader think is a great thing.


This was a great mind teaser

[The ArK]

Thank u, my friend.