The Broken Vow

I had a recent break-up with a guy that I could say I fell in love with. He was my first kiss and he was my world. Two months with this guy made me happy, but when it ended I did not know what to do.

There is no more room for you,

I have locked the doors,

When will you get the clue?

My heart can not take anymore.

 

On the day of our first date,

Your eyes stared deeply into mine,

As if we were brought together by fate.

We were two young lovers lost in time.

 

My lips were inches apart from your face,

And I closed my eyes to feel the spark,

Your hand behind my neck for a closer embrace.

As everything around us seemed to turn dark.

 

I was lost in a world I never knew,

But you took me there for a day,

That is when I told you that I loved you.

And that I wanted you to always stay.

 

With a smile you said you had a vow,

A vow that will never be lost or broken,

You pulled me closer and raised a brow.

I promise to mean every word spoken.

 

You had me locked under your spell,

I did not believe anyone but you,

But you were slowly dragging me to Hell.

As our hearts no longer stuck like glue.

 

On one rainy afternoon you called me,

And you told me that things were lame,

But I was being the best that I could be.

I was exhausted from trying not to be the same.

 

I came to reality when tears fell down,

As I figured out that you wanted me to change,

But I am the type of girl to stand my ground.

I am not going to be strapped to those chains.

 

So do not come knocking anymore,

Because you once had your chance,

But you just walked out that open door.

I have fallen out from your trance.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I am sorry for this poem being so long, but I needed to get all of these feelings out. I have been meaning to write a poem about this guy. Now I have done so. I would like some reviews about this and how I could revise this in anyway possible.

Reviews

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

This is not long, long is what I do lol but I will say this is very touching and well conveyed I very much enjoyed this poem thanks for sharing and I am also an emotional writer and everything pours out on to the page

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I usually try not to write too long. I do not want to bore someone or even myself. :P thank you for such kind and encouraging words, Samantha.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

Even though my poetry can reach longer proportions it never gets boring and your stuff is far from boring and you are welcome

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Oh, I believe you. I have read some of your work and it is really amazing. It is not boring at all :)

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

:) Thanks Ashley

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You are welcome! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Wasn't too long. You told a story of love born and left. I did like the ending. Good to dispose of cold and useless people.Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Thank you. I tried not to make it too long. I find it hard to read long poetry sometimes. I wrote one poem that was really long once. On every single poem, I try to make a dramatic ending. Thank you once again. :D

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Anahat]

I love ur writing....its again a beautifully writen piece....touched my heart...
Just one advice dont ever change urslf fr a guy or anyone....the who asks u to change
and cannot accpt u as u r...can never love u truly....keep smiling...n keep writing! :*

[Anahat]

I love ur writing....its again a beautifully writen piece....touched my heart...
Just one advice dont ever change urslf fr a guy or anyone....the who asks u to change
and cannot accpt u as u r...can never love u truly....keep smiling...n keep writing! :*

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I do not let anyone bring me down or tell me what to do, especially a guy. I do not like feeling pushed to do something. I am against all of that stuff. So, thank you for the advice anyways. Thank you for the sweet review. I am happy that it touched you and that you like my writing. It truly means a lot when I get a fan! :P I guess I can call people that like my work a "fan."

[Anahat]

That great! N yea sure...y not...people likin ur wrk r ur fans...
Review mine...hope u like them too!
Regards anahat

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I sure will review yours. You have taken your time out to read a few of mine. I will do the honors. :)

[❤ Maggie ❤..]

This was so good. It's so sad, though :/ Break up's are so difficult. I think it's nice how you get your feelings out through words, though. It's one of the best ways to express yourself. But honey, you are so much better off without him. If he was stupid enough to let you go, then he doesn't deserve you. And that just means that there are other guys out there that are so much better than him. It hurts now, but in the long run it's all gonna be worth it. My friend told me when I was going through a similar situation, "If he doesn't treat you like the princess you are, he's not the one for you." You deserve more than that. Great job with this :)

[Kimmie]

A break up is hard dear, but you need show him that you can move on that you're not breaking inside. Show him how strong you are and most of all, be yourself.

He missed out, that's why they come from Jupiter! (-;

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Kimmie, thank you for the review. I truly appreciate it. I wrote this poem to get it off of my mind. Yes, I did break up with him. Actually I broke up with him twice. It is a long story. He didn't want me to let go though. I suggested just being friends which only tore me into pieces. He moved on the very next day with another girl. A day or two after that he told her that he loved her. I saw all of this on Instagram (if you're familiar with that app) I was so hurt, and to this day it still upsets me in a way. But I have moved on. I have met better guys. I think what really made it hard for me to forget was wondering if any guy has meant anything he has told me. It made me not want to trust anymore because of that one guy. He was technically my first kiss and my first real boyfriend. So I think it was an emotional attachment. I am over him now though. Thank you for the inspirational words. It means a lot. Some come from Mars though. :D

[Kimmie]

I am familiar with Instagram. I personally don't like it, I think it can bring a lot of problems... so I tell my friends and kids to stay away from FB, Twitter and other Social Networks. Leave him be, he obviously doesn't know what he's missing. And yes, some do. It's rare though!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Yeah, I figured that you would know what Instagram was. It is one of the most popular apps in the world. But I like it alright. I don't like Facebook especially. It is boring and there is way too much drama. With Twitter, I don't understand how to work it. xD I will let him be. It wasn't obviously meant to be. I will leave it like that. I am better off without him. I know what you mean. Most guys are from Jupiter though. Haha :D

[Kimmie]

You are better off without him. And yes, most are from Jupiter! (-;