Man

By taking life what do we gain rendering us all one has owned Do we inherit sorrowed pain for our own failure to have grown

             

Many men awed by another

have then sought out their fellows land

Man shall turn brother on brother

to steal of him his woman's hand

 

How do we claim the virtue love

yet pray to our war in the same

We speak of peace from up above

then kill each other in his name

 

By taking life what do we gain

rendering all someone may own

Do we inherit sorrowed pain

for our own failure to have grown

 

I see good men, both meek and mild

but those who kill so needlessly

Take life of someone’s loving child

depleting all humanity

 

What will they say when we're no more

beware those who kill their own kind

We will become what all deplore

until only the wind you'll find

 

Author's Note

A simple note to mark the passing of the human race. If we continue to mortgage our children's futures, someday we will be a footnote to history.

Reviews

[David W Moore III]

when possessions dictate how we treat others it is indeed a sad state. Down to the smallest social level, we battle over possessions. Sad

[Rossen]

Your poem said what needed to be said
and Tony said the rest.

I will try to add a touch.

Plato and Aristotle taught the argument thinking style.
You say yours... I attack, You counterattack so we fence...

There are many other styles... like this cafe,
parallel style thinking, going in the same direction.

aah! we do not attack we flow...
along side of the other.

"Teach the children and
let them lead the way"

Don't let our creative
thinking slip away...

We call violence "action"
build up the "action hero"

Setting up justifiable killings!
kill kill kill as many as you possibly can...

Our overgrown military industrial
complex NEEDS FEEDING ...so

School boys and girls parish
in the name of god and country

Our welfare gets the bill

One who has a healthy,
competitive internal
thought process...

Needs not to" beat "as many
people as they possibly can.

The Right Brain is a, Terrible thing to waist!

Tate, you moved me today I thank you.


Rossen

[Tommy]

You know I look at what has transpired in Egypt over the last little while, and am brought some hope in my heart that change to come may come by peaceful means. I am often found on the flip side of the coin saying that humanity has lost its prowess to be humane, but it would seem to be in our nature to be humanly humane as it is to be inhumane, and then who is left to govern our actions. I love this piece Tate! And it makes me think on the fact that war can be waged for good just as it can for evil, but in the waging it is sure to bring pain no matter what we are fighting for. A realist look at it I guess, but for the question of, What good does it bring? This cannot be judged by us in the here and now, because it is the future of humanity that is to gain the benefits or regressions. And then I guess you have to ask those who war has benefited or denied the quality of life from these actions of battle if it was worth while. I hope we can take to heart what the people of Egypt has proclaimed in a peaceful manner for to gain freedom; something to be brought to light in all the darkness covering the land.

Great Write Tate!
RLG,
Tommy

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Love this verse:

"What will they say when we're gone

beware those who kill their own kind

As they will destroy all that is

until only the wind you'll find"

yes, they just might say these words.. this poem tears at your heart and soul.
your author"s note really hits you.

Chloe

[ice]

Tate
"Many a man awed by others
has then sought out his fellows land"

Including us, the destruction of first nation peoples from their land
Is a perfect example.

"How do we claim the virtue love
yet pray to our war in the same
We speak of peace from up above
then kill each other in his name"

These are the "war prayers" we have spoken about before.
And they still are prayed...but to what God?

".. they will destroy all that is
until only the wind you'll find"

A haunting but plausable thought.

But I am glad you wrote about it.
THank you for writing it.
ice

[EmpressPoetess]

yeah, I feel you on this one; don't we see it everyday, while they declare peace is at hand? how can you have peace by making war? well said.

[Julie Beth]

this is REALLY good you did an outstanding job :)

[Beatles9322]

VERY impressed! It speaks of absolute truth and does have a lyrical quality. My favorite work of yours yet. It inspires people to really think about man. Gorgeous poem!!!!

[Zeek4]

I was very impressed with this one. The message is so relevant and the lyrical quality it great. Good job.

[Katie L]

I like it a lot and i think that you are right someday our children will look back and see what we did weather it is good or bad they will look back and remeber