Trouble

 

My own rendering of ex girlfriend Robyn Cooper and I. She the mother of the little boy Drake, to whom I dedicated my second book.

Tarry not down life's long road

stay quick fleet and true

Weary's the path on which you tread

be mindful of that you do

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Seek the heart as long you search

wrap it tight in Love's embrace

be mindful to it's needs and wants

keep it clothed in silk and lace

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Never assume once struck by love

she would not wish you to replace

But learn you hard as she is scarred

the feel of loss from her embrace

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Take you this from the lips of a sinner

heal the calluses, wounds and sores

The smart man learns from his mistakes

while the wise man learns from yours

 

Author's Note

It is always after the fact that we notice the problems that we ourselves have fed.

Reviews

[Magdelena]

Hey!!! Know what? You one wise man me friend.. I have met many out there, yet you.... Ahhhhh The wisest there is. For you write with soul. Deep inside of you lives a old soul from way back and with it came a gift that will last a lifetime.. And you know how to use it my friend.. That is your gift for all.. Your gift to us.. And we thank you kindly..

Grace'

Mags xx

[Laura E. Aranda]

thank you for submitting this in my contest. I really liked the drawing you added ...the first stanza was my favorite...but the last lines are the ones that stayed with me:

The smart man learns from his mistakes

while the wise man learns from yours

[Jade Leilani]

How unfortunate that hindsight is always 20/20. You've skillfully woven words that bring a warning to those in present sight to treasure what is and wisdom to all to learn not just from their own failings but those of others. Profoundly simple truth : "The smart man learns from his mistakes while the wise man learns from yours"
Thank you for that.

[Seriana]

This is a wonderful piece. It made me sad a little, yet filled with hope at the end. I loved the way you wove your words together. They fit neatly and rhyme nicely. And your rendering adds just the right physical touch to the verbal. Nicely done!

[LadyNaida]

This is so true. And sometimes when we realize it might be too late.

[msharma]

A wise man's draft .Very skillful

[WeekendWriter]

Tate,

I've often heard the expression 'an old woman's soul' when speaking of a much younger female, but your poetry speaks from an old man's soul. Wise beyond your years, learned in life. Another excellent piece.

Kathy

[Gone]

Like many of the others who have reviewed before me I am taken by your last stanza. I would elaberate more but it has all been said. This is another one of the wise, heartfelt and brutallly honest writes that I enjoy so much.

[Christina May Shanaberg]

The last two lines say it all! Very nicely penned and, I must say, you are quite a good artist, too!! This one is going to the library!!!

[HorrorMaster]

Really good and cool song

[TJ]

Tate, another beautiful and well constructed piece, my friend. Not only that but the message in these words is so clear and true. Be mindful of our action, especially to those who trust us withtheir hears and those we trust with our own. We can have an impact that goes far beyond our knowledge.

"Take you this from the lips of a sinner
heal the calluses, wounds and sores
The smart man learns from his mistakes
while the wise man learns from yours"

Truth brother