Trouble

 

My own rendering of ex girlfriend Robyn Cooper and I. She the mother of the little boy Drake, to whom I dedicated my second book.

Tarry not down life's long road

stay quick fleet and true

Weary's the path on which you tread

be mindful of that you do

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Seek the heart as long you search

wrap it tight in Love's embrace

be mindful to it's needs and wants

keep it clothed in silk and lace

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Never assume once struck by love

she would not wish you to replace

But learn you hard as she is scarred

the feel of loss from her embrace

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Take you this from the lips of a sinner

heal the calluses, wounds and sores

The smart man learns from his mistakes

while the wise man learns from yours

 

Author's Note

It is always after the fact that we notice the problems that we ourselves have fed.

Reviews

[Magdelena]

Hey!!! Know what? You one wise man me friend.. I have met many out there, yet you.... Ahhhhh The wisest there is. For you write with soul. Deep inside of you lives a old soul from way back and with it came a gift that will last a lifetime.. And you know how to use it my friend.. That is your gift for all.. Your gift to us.. And we thank you kindly..

Grace'

Mags xx

[Epipsychologist]

Not to overanalyze, but I like the way the action comes before the subject for most of these lines. It emphasizes that the sentences are in the imperative (i.e. issuing advice) and that the advice matters.

Excellent write as always Tate.

[Tate Morgan]

Yews you have noticed a way i like to tell a story with the lesson at the end Thank you

[Marie]

Excellent...especially the last two lines...if we could learn from own own mistakes and other's as well...how wise we all would be.

[Tate Morgan]

THANK YOU marie

[Cassie]

Tate this is yet another one of your beautiful words, very inspiring and i Like the message.

[Tate Morgan]

Thank you cassie thank you so much

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

It has been far too long since I have stepped through the gardens of your words, Tate. This was beautifully crafted, as always. The last stanza really made an impact on me...I so often look back upon things in my life and wonder "would it have been different, if...", and I think that learning from one's mistakes (as well as taking the advice of those who have lived a thing before you have) is possibly the most important, as well as the most difficult thing to learn in life. Some people tend to band their heads upon the same door over and over again, instead of listening to those around them who are attempting to suggest they turn the knob. Well done!

[Tate Morgan]

Thank you so much This is Robyn Cooper the mother of Little Drake I write about now and then

[sharonlee]

That last stanza is so potent... rounds this with a smile.

[AlieahRose]

THIS IS TRUE...
THE LAST STANZA...
MORE THAN ANYTHING...
ANOTHER GREAT WRITE...

[joshua deathdealer]

"But learn you hard as she is scarred the feel of loss from her embrace"..such an emotional poem and the wording is so refreshing. Excellent, excellent work.

[Abdul Aziz]

Beautiful, Tate. I wish I could say more. I could write on the technical aspects of the poem, but then it would be devoid of any meaning. Emotion is the driving force behind this poem, and you're as good as any I know in conveying it. The clarity and honesty of your words is something I hope to emulate. Thank you for sharing this poem!