Trouble

 

My own rendering of ex girlfriend Robyn Cooper and I. She the mother of the little boy Drake, to whom I dedicated my second book.

Tarry not down life's long road

stay quick fleet and true

Weary's the path on which you tread

be mindful of that you do

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Seek the heart as long you search

wrap it tight in Love's embrace

be mindful to it's needs and wants

keep it clothed in silk and lace

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Never assume once struck by love

she would not wish you to replace

But learn you hard as she is scarred

the feel of loss from her embrace

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Take you this from the lips of a sinner

heal the calluses, wounds and sores

The smart man learns from his mistakes

while the wise man learns from yours

 

Author's Note

It is always after the fact that we notice the problems that we ourselves have fed.

Reviews

[Magdelena]

Hey!!! Know what? You one wise man me friend.. I have met many out there, yet you.... Ahhhhh The wisest there is. For you write with soul. Deep inside of you lives a old soul from way back and with it came a gift that will last a lifetime.. And you know how to use it my friend.. That is your gift for all.. Your gift to us.. And we thank you kindly..

Grace'

Mags xx

[Coyote Poetry]

True wisdom from your words. If I listen to my Grandfather and followed his direction. I would of been in a lot better situation then I'm in today. Line lines are outstanding. Thank you.
Coyote

[H. A. M.]

"The smart man learns from his mistakes
while the wise man learns from yours."
I like the ending! Makes me think not to take anything for granted.

[Irena]

great rhyming and good word choice overall its an awesome poem!! there's so much poetry on this website but this one really stands out to be me
great read :)

[Lena M. P.]

How very true. We do more damage by not listening than anything else. Not listening to our hearts, experience shared by others, or even to each other. It is usually too late when we think back at how often we were warned. This poem is very special and written from the heart of someone who has been there. Never give up. Give all to love and it will return it tenfold. Maybe not right away, but your time will come. I truly treasure this poem.

[Tommy]

"The smart man learns from his mistakes, While the wise man learns from yours." This is what I find to be the most powerful statement in this piece! Profound it is to end your piece upon these words; for so true are they! It seems that most have to learn from life the hard way leaving them with the calloused hands from the work of just trying to survive the hardness of this world. It comes to mind all the elders who warned me of my ways, and most of their words have come back to haunt me by my ill heed to their advice. However, I believe character comes from these lessons learned through these experiences of life lived first hand. And it is those who have strong character that tend to leave the deepest impression upon my mind. So I have learned to keep an open ear, and most important an open heart to the words of those who have learned firsthand the hardships of life. Knowledge comes from experience, and with the little experience I have, I have learned to listen to those who know from experience. However, I do not consider myself smart or wise so by no means do I expect to be heard. lol.

This is a great write Tate; one among many writ by someone who I have learned to respect as though he has learned from life experience that what he speaks, so I find your words to be words of knowledge.

Great Write! Thanks For Sharing!
RLG,
Tommy

P.S.
Don't change your style, because it is your own. I hope at some point to discover my own style, and I think that many here and in the future may look upon yours as one they will try to emulate. There is always room for growth, but never conform.

[Charles]

As usual, good form, tight scheme, nice rhyming. I like stanza two quite a bit and think stanza four is outstanding - the message in the latter is profound. 'Wearies' in line 3 bothers me. If you mean 'weary is the path...' the form should be weary's (contracting the 'is' to 'apostrophe-s'. In line 4 I think 'what' would be better than 'that.' And, if in line 10 you mean 'she would not wish to replace you' the inversion of the sentence is distracting (just to force the rhyme). That last stanza, though - wonderful

[HopelesslyDevoted]

the ending on this left me wanting more... very interesting

[Valentine]

How true this is..I thinkl we all have been guilty of some of this in our lifetime..Good one tate..I really liked it,...lol an God bless..Kathie

[MuSe Ampoule]

Brilliant work as always and I love the accompanying music. Only those who have lived many years know the truth of these wise words. You don't need to step in a pile of manure to know it stinks. The last stanza says it all!

[Call Me Blu]

I loved this peice as always! But I was wondering, do you ever consider trying a diffrent style? I mean, I love your poems as is, but it would be cool to see the same wise and admired Tate, in a diffrent form. If you don't want to that is fine and nice, and I will go on loving your poetry. I just thought that maybe if you tried a s diffrent format you could have more room for adding a touch of whimsy. This style to me seems to add a little bit of darkness to your poems. Still love them all, just a thought I had