The Letter

My rendition of my loving wife 

Rebecca and my first grandchild Payton, on her first day of life. 

This my letter to you my dear

who have never written to me

I set before you my great hopes

of the dreams that may come to be

 

I laid out the coin we minted

within my heart's own treasury

To toss about the thoughts we had

of our own benedictory

 

You stamped this coin upon my soul

embossed with love of hope divine

Pressed in the mint of memory

you will age like the finest wine

 

Should you choose to ever leave me

may we find our lost love and stay

Like dreams we both had forgotten

from the hopes of our yesterday

 

Author's Note

I dreamed a dream that became Rebecca my wife. Herein lies the truth of a tangible life. Oh on our deathbeds will we look back and find the thing we cherished valued and loved was something we barely touched yet dreamed might touch us;that of the love of another unconditionally reaffirming our right to exist and reason to live.

Reviews

[Rikkevi Rue]

ahh your subtle and clever "turn o the tongue" rings with the sweet music of the Irish laddie! You have that simple frank statement of the truths of life well honed, and it is a pleasure to read you Master Morgan.

The rhyming of this piece is what I like, and the structure of it

[HopelesslyDevoted]

awww this is truly wonderfully! i love the line
you will age like the finest wine

what a great picture of loving someone for years and years to come :)

[Charles]

As the year ends, you continue with your fine word-smithing - rhyme and meter quite precise. I do have three comments (no surprise there). First, line 2 deserves a singular verb, has (not have). Second, again an apostrophe question - in line 6 I think it should be 'heart's' own. The final comment is more troublesome in a way... the tense seems to keep shifting throughout the poem. 'May come' in the first stanza seems to set a future conditional situation (right after 'set' established the past tense). The second stanza and first three lines of the third re-establish the past tense, but then the fourth lines slips into the future before becoming future conditional again in the last stanza. This makes it just a bit hard for me follow as I try to trace your heart through the years. Happy New Year to you and yours.

[Andrew Wright]

What a pretty poem :) I'm glad to have read it!

[Caitlynxoxo]

"Like dreams we both have forgotten
from the hopes of our yesterday"

I absolutely loved this poem, because of how simply, yet powerfully romantic this was. It had a wonderful, sort of dream-like flow to it, which along with the beautiful wording, made it a pleasure to read! :) Thanks for sharing

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

[Cherrie Palmer]

This is soft open and loving, a tender communication of love. I know your wife must have felt very special on receiving such a warm expression of adoration. you flow was simple and realing, with a easy rhyme that coos in the readers ear.

[Crowley]

mmmmmm...this was delicious. That second stanza is so good. It is so good when drems come true especially ehen the revolve around the attention of a woman who grabs us by the heart and gives our head a whirl. Nice stuff Tate.

[the_stoic]

the last stanza is what strikes me .. realism at its best

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this is romantism at it's best. With true sentiment, the metaphors are bold and clear. You flow and meter is as always impeccable.

[T. J. Blackburn]

Thank you for inviting me to enjoy this poem. I love the analogy of minting/treasury with love. Excellent

I like this -->"This my letter to you my dear/who have never written to me"