The Wind

When I was young through beauties gaze

winds blew by me as if to sing

Their songs of love to me were praise

that lifted me upon their wing

 

Rich did the spoils of time unroll

an empire's trophies I would raise

And write my name across life's scroll

to earn the laurels of friend's praise

 

Can anyone know what will come

when the wind blows us cold and gale

Or what direction it be from

when finally we set our sail

 

But now those days are tempered dear

time's winds no longer sing for me

For now the quiet hush I hear

makes life's truth so easy to see

 

Author's Note

Time has a way of answering our questions if we listen.

Reviews

[Mark]

I don't really understand what God's plan is in this regard, that our abilites and even our destinies seem to remain hidden from us in large measure (if not totally) until we are old, and, looking back, mutter, "Oh, yeah, there's where I shoulda..." I hear in this verse a certain degree of that wistfulness, that regret, and as might be apparent, I can identify with those sentiments completely. May I add here that your ability to render deep and complex thoughts in perfectly crafted rhyme and meter is such a rare ability here, and I commend you highly; it is what, in my not-at-all-humble opinion, changes a mere philosophical ramble into a poem.

[Ramiz Ilham Khan]

So true .. :-)

[china]

This is beautifully written and I love the Bob Dylan song you post on here, it brings the poem out.

[The Analog Kid]

Nice, simple and straight-forward use of the universal theme of time.

[Magdelena]

Tate, this just blew me away. Yet also made me somewhat sad.. The ending for me, brought this sadness. I guess it's the way I felt it.. For I would always want to hear the song in the wind..

All in all, as always, just superb..

Mags xx

[Prateeksha Khot]

beautiful.............

[Jazique]

Awesome you should put some periods and other punctutaions in their, but other in that well done.

[Richard Williams]

A very heartwarming poem, nice flow and thought. All stanzas are right on and I really like the second one. Fine work.

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

I love this Line Beautiful, amazing work.





When I was young through beauties gaze

winds blew by me as if to sing

Their songs of love to me were praise

that lifted me upon their wing





Simply Lovely Nice work BRAVO. god bless lily.

[SM Davis]

the third stanza is especially good. the entire poem is done well.