Tin Man

it is such a strange thing to be human

 

 

I hear the rhythm of the rain

wind-whipped drops falling to the ground

Tapping on the old window pane

there's music in that lonesome sound

 

Skipping through the morning shower

daisies covered by mist in dew

Calm and warm so tame with power

life springs forth all fresh and anew

 

Watching the world's sins melt away

gifting life with the chance to be

Feeling the sun light up the day

washing the blues away from me

 

Like the man built solely from tin

with a chest full of broken dreams

The rain falls softly on my skin

nothing quite the way that it seems

 

Watching the clouds that turn to rain

falling on the glass by and by

They run down from the window pane

before the grace of you kneel I

 

Author's Note

Such a metaphor for my own life the tin man. Often I am right as rain. Moments later set by depression and doubt. Then the rain comes washes away the blues and I am fine again. The sun comes up and shines upon me again.All my worries pale in consequence.
Tate

Reviews

[TrimarcoRansome]

Hi Tate, After having a break I find this easier too read...Sometimes when you have been working n your own work it's hard to get into a different rhyme, so my fault not yours! I was going to add to my original comment but it seems it has been deleted?!

[Tate Morgan]

Hi dear. I suppose your trouble with the rhyme is the first stanza the one and only time i can remember using a similar rhyme .

[TrimarcoRansome]

Hi Tate,
Yes I think it is, how about around/round instead of down?

[Tate Morgan]

I like that see what you think

[TrimarcoRansome]

Yes! That is so much easier to read now! Really flows and takes you straight into the rest of it

[Tate Morgan]

thank you you were correct i think

[TrimarcoRansome]

Don't rely on me! do what you think is right, I have been working on several pieces of writing recently and it can get stuck in your head sometimes!

[Tate Morgan]

I like your thoughts and respect your opinion. You are classically educated through the English system .

[CLUTZ]

Beautiful

[George Love]

Love it, and the song going with it. You capture this well, and love the image of the tin man as well.

[CLosed]

Brilliant write, so much like my own mental state.
I enjoyed this very much.
Thankyou for sharing.

[Dave M. Pitman]

I really enjoyed reading this, as well as realizing my inner tin man.

Great work!

[Katie L]

this pretty good

[Julijana Velichkovska]

I loved the thin man when i was a little girl, the man wonted a heart! how noble that is, and he already had one... something like Miguel Pinero's - "Seeking the cause"!
I like the rhyming and the story... Beautiful poem!

[LadyNaida]

Love the music by the way!

[LadyNaida]

I love the Wizard of Oz! This is a lovely poem. I can just imagine what it would be just to stand there helpless and rusty without being able to move in such a beautiful and magical world like Emerald City.