The Error of My Ways

My rendition of my inner self.Graphite on canvas.

 

Every sweet life flowers golden

mixing old colors in with the new

Creating a wonderful child each time

of a mixed ever changing hue

 

My life has been both heartache

along by spirits of love in rain

Tossed up around and foundered

with the dreams I cannot attain

 

As I recall the lost soft beauty

of aching spirits in still delight

I looked to God's sweet Heaven

with thoughts that stir the night

 

For life's time waits on none of us

it masters fate with earnest callous

Caring for none in favored mercy

helping not whom it shows malice

 

But I shall have known wisdom

with his brother mighty pain

As my friends they so haunt me

with joys I'll never know again

 

I walked the earth so emboldened

in my brazen younger days

That I missed chances so golden

for the poor error of my ways

 

 

Author's Note

I'm sure given the same circumstances and life. I would do the same things again. Such is the truth of humanity. We do not think much on the truths of life until we are made to. If only we could live life backwards. I think I would like to be Benjamin Button.
Tate

Reviews

[Stacey]

This is a very tender verse....and again BRAVO on song choice:) Time waits for no one is so very true, when you added "it masters fate with earnest callous" you set the tone of this write beautifully. All the times we hurt, hurt another or tumble and fall on our path I think is what makes the rest of our journey a wonderful ride and pleasant to the soles of our feet. I would love go back in time and right some wrongs, but then again if I did not have those experiences I would not be the wise woman I am today. Wonderful write!

[Beatles9322]

Wow! This is really great! I can totally relate to this.

[SK Woodiwiss]

Your work grabs our heart strings, no doubt. I've read your work and keep coming back to it. However sometimes I think you are holding out on us. Might just be because the sun has decided to shine two days in a row in northern Indiana, I don't know I just have this feeling...

[Liza]

you have found the beauty in the mistakes and the pain; molded your ashes into a lovely expression for us to contemplate.

[zombiikillah666]

Yes, i agree with eeevveeerrything devons said. (:
cause i understand what he is saying...
but anyhoo....i really liked this....
it one, has nice big purty words.
second, it flows good.
and third...it makes me think of summertime, and playing on a tire swing.
you have a talent. yay. good job. (:

[Devons]

Above all I like the opening verse best. It communicates a sense of refreshed existence, a new wave of the world; rebirth through another individual, each sufficiently different from the last, yet made from the past.
The remainder of the poem is reflective and introspective, though tender and honest; showing how time disappears and ever moves along. A sagacious, faintly sad and mature poem.

[deeps]

Such a wonderful write here, I can feel the emotions pour out.
This is very well written.

[Ruth]

Inner reflection, great write hon:)
A moving poem - you know, I wonder if any of us would do things differently!lol
xx

[Lilly]

Love the reflective tone of this

[Jordan]

Lovely poem.. :) You seem to be writing more and more about your past and about life around you.. It's very interesting the way you put it into words.