For My Child

Tatertot

 

If insight be what you lack

then son take it all from me

I shall give it to you freely

in hopes that you may see

 

If love is what you should seek

what tales my heart might tell

It has known heights and depths

of the soul as deep as a well

 

If I could grant precious wisdom

to enlighten your fair sight

I'd say play with your children

teach each how to fly a kite

 

But learn these old lessons now

while I am here that you might see

For the day will sometime come

when my light shall cease to be

 

That eve my heart be silent

its music shall play no score

The mind will  go dusk quiet

to be heard from never-more

 

But heard next day the singing

will float out above the din

The Caroling Angels call

beckoning me to come back in

 

On that distant fateful morning

I'll stand before them to say

" I washed my soul with happiness

then taught my son to play"

 

 

Author's Note

For life's time waits on none of us.
It masters fate with earnest callous.
Caring for none in favored mercy.
Helping not who it shows malice.

The times they are a changing .

Reviews

[VioletRose]

This poem is not only amazing but Sweet, Kind and AWESOME!

[deeps]

This is just so amazing.
I really like this Tate!
It's beuatiful

[S.W.]

What a lovely peom and a great dedication to your Son. You sound very proud, as i'm sure your son is of you too.

[Charles]

Sometimes your messages get in the way of the technical aspects of your poetry, as it does here. The message is strong - a universal truth (probably repeated by many poets over the years - though I'd be hard pressed to say who; maybe ministers at a pulpit have said such things more frequently). Technically, I'd say the poem begins with the third stanza and that the last stanza is the strongest In the third stanza, I think it would be better to stick with 'children' or 'child' rather than mix the two. There's a lot going on in the 4th-6th stanzas (light ceasing, heart going silent, mind going quiet, singing floating, angels calling) - enough to disrupt the steady flow of the theme. Perhaps something could be done about all this, which makes the poem seem too 'noisy' when you're aiming (I think) for something more peaceful. Of course, it's hard to pick through these technical things because of the heartfelt message, but I think it would be worth the effort. Strong abcb rhyming sequence with no strain to get at the rhyme (yeah, I saw the 'thee' but didn't think it out of place). Good writing

[SR Urie]

Tate,
Good write, a superb reflection to Bob's golden hit. You're a lucky man to have such a fine son. BZ

[Scarlet Pulse]

Oh my goodness, amazing poem, very inspirational, sweet, pretty much made me cry!!! It is so sweet! I loved it, and as always, beautiful.

[Jeff Bresee]

Oh I really like this one. It strikes a chord close to home.

[The Analog Kid]

Nice. Spend time with him now and impart the wisdom. Universal life-cycle theme.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Great write from a father who would want the best things in life for his son...I know the feeling of wanting to give them the best that life has to offer...But most of all joy and the ability to enjoy the little things in life that brings the best joyous moments...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sunflower..

[Ruth]

Beautiful dedication love! xx