Fate

For when could I say that i believed I was such a treasured soul

 

Lucy Hamilton

 Princess of Ireland

When could I say that I believed

I was such a treasured soul

To give up the life you've conceived

for a chance at half not whole

 

Having tasted the nectar of life

who can say they would pass it on

For years full of trouble and strife

filled with all of what was, now gone

 

Life wasn't meant to cost so much

that you pay for your love in tears

I couldn't bear it to be such

that I cost you unhappy years

 

Many a night I looked up in awe

to the sweet sky above my head

Longing to be that star you saw

to hear the wistful things you said

 

So now I lie in wait for dawn

watching the stars all twinkle out

Dreaming of things that were, now gone

we never thought we’d live without

Author's Note

To Lucy Hamilton of Ireland. Brightest star in the Northern sky.

Reviews

[Lena M. P.]

To dream... to want...to pretend. This can be more fulfilling than the reality at times. Keep dreaming. In dreams we have what in life we must do without.

[A.r. Bazian]

i loved this one!
let alone the strong structure (excuse my arrogance, if it may seem so, i speak only of my experience), this had its tole on me!
i loved it!

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

Reality can be better then Imagination life is what we make of it. but nice write again

[vandana]

Life wasn’t meant to cost so much
that you pay for your love in tears
I couldn't bear it to be such
that I cost you your life in years

Well written poem on life...i liked reading these lines in particular. Good Job !

[Prateeksha Khot]

you speak of such amazing things in your poem. And that is why i love reading them

[Nayan]

Characteristic of your class Tate!, the poem how beautifully speaks of the things that one thinks and one gets!

I cannot select lines of this marvelous piece, though the following lines I loved so much!

"Life wasn’t meant to cost so much
that you pay for your love in tears
I couldn't bear it to be such
that I cost you your life in years"

Thanks for sharing :)

[The Wave]

Lovely piece here.

It has great flow and rhythm... And your ability to always pick the right words to use still amazes me.
Good Job

[E. A. Fielder]

I always find it interesting to see how music inspires your writing. I think this is my new favorite of yours!

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Great poetic write with much emotion...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sunflower

[EMW]

I like it