Fate

For when could I say that i believed I was such a treasured soul

 

Lucy Hamilton

 Princess of Ireland

When could I say that I believed

I was such a treasured soul

To give up the life you've conceived

for a chance at half not whole

 

Having tasted the nectar of life

who can say they would pass it on

For years full of trouble and strife

filled with all of what was, now gone

 

Life wasn't meant to cost so much

that you pay for your love in tears

I couldn't bear it to be such

that I cost you unhappy years

 

Many a night I looked up in awe

to the sweet sky above my head

Longing to be that star you saw

to hear the wistful things you said

 

So now I lie in wait for dawn

watching the stars all twinkle out

Dreaming of things that were, now gone

we never thought we’d live without

Author's Note

To Lucy Hamilton of Ireland. Brightest star in the Northern sky.

Reviews

[LadyNaida]

This is beautiful!

[Scarlet Pulse]

I love the picture you incorporated with the poem. The blue eye that stands out between the golden leaves that covers the burgundy hair. Wow. What a powerful poem. Your language is beautiful and all the words just melt together. I really loved this poem. There are some lines that stood out to me and I loved the most: Life wasn’t meant to cost so much

that you pay for your love in tears
Many a night I looked up in awe

to the sweet sky above my head

Longing to be that star you saw
So now I lie in wait for dawn

watching the stars all twinkle out

Dreaming of things that were, now gone

we never thought we’d live without
Awesome poem. Great write.

[The Analog Kid]

Nice reflection on reality/dreams. The flow took me for a ride on this one!

[VioletRose]

Very Nice...It was GOOD!

[C.J.G.]

very nice!

[JENY]

Attempt of your mind to come to terms with reality….
In the form of poem….
Its beautiful…

[salvador (camuel choisu..]

What can i say bad about this poem um nothing it was wonderful i actually really enjoyed read it.

[gravitylava]

yeah, way to go! :)