Days to Remember

Build your dreams with greatest care Don’t think on lives great sorrowed past Create a world so wondrous That through ice and fire it will last

Tatertot and I sharing a life lesson

We are architects of our fate

working within constraints of time

Some mens lives do seem so blessed

while others seem riddled with crime

 

For each of us stack stones of life

from our yesterdays we borrow

The blocks from which we build our days

are foundations for tomorrow

 

Build your dreams with greatest care

don't think on life's great sorrowed past

Create a world so wondrous

that through ice and fire it will last

 

Your child’s future held in your hands

go from failures cold darkened din

Show your son where you are going

not the tale of where you have been

Author's Note

Be the beacon your child uses to light his way!
Not the darkened night he shuns!

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the last stanza of this poem. I have to agree with this. I am a single mother who is trying to make a better life for me and my son by going back to college once again to get a degree that will make life a little easier.

[LonelySoul]

there is no fate,but what we make for ourselves,
beware the monsters we build within,
place no life upon the shelves,
or those nightmares will begin...LonelySoul

[Ruth]

This is moving Tate, really touching xx

[JENY]

Nice piece of writing….
Insightful…..
Wisdom gathered from life experiences….
Good reading…

[Charles]

This is a nice poem (again with a life's lesson) done with your usual flair for rhyme and meter. I do notice that the first two and last two of the lines in each of the first two stanzas (whew, there's something to figure out - lines 1-2 and 3-4 in one case and lines 5-6 and 7-8 in the other) are disjointed (address different issues), making me look for commas after lines 2 and 6. You have no such punctuation in the poem, so of course there are no commas - I'm only pointing out what was noticeable when I read the poem. From a technical point of view, i like the 2nd stanza best, the 3rd stanza next, The 4th stanza is a clincher emotionally and a good closing for the poem. Good one!

[Samuel Dickens]

Your example of the building blocks is a good one. Indeed, we are builders our whole lives, but some walls will tumble while others endure.

[WeekendWriter]

I'm generally not a big fan of poetry, but I do come across one every now and then that 'strikes' me.... this was one.

Nice job.... keep writing!!

[gseverns]

love this. Not much else to say, you said it all.

[Prateeksha Khot]

parents are the greatest teachers of their children as they emulate them knowingly and unknowingly. Hence the parents should keep in mind as to what they are doing and what message they are sending across to their kids.
Beautiful poem. I really liked it.