Ode to Her

The fruits loins I would not know

 

 

Fruits of loins I might never know

had we never loved so sweet

When we did plant seeds of desire

little chancing we might meet

 

Holding my breath as I jumped

chancing all on a single toss

Leaped the very bonds of Earth

trying for the worlds I would cross

 

But God did see my grasp inflated

as he pulled me back to Earth

Saying of my tenacity

"you have overstepped your worth"

 

Filled with confidence I did go

not caring what he had said

For I would listen to no one

as I had no fear nor dread

 

Now holding to that grasp of faith

it's for you I shed my tears

Knowing you alone were worthy

of loving all of my years

 

Author's Note

A dream that once was an obsession! The only one that got away.

Reviews

[SR Urie]

Hey Tate,
"Faint heart ne'er won fair lady," right? As my old basketball coach once said, 'smile and the world will smile with you," and tell her how you feel or go home and yank on it yerself. Good rhythym and meter, sir, but your prose kind of lost me a bit at the end.
Good job man! Keep it up. BZ

If you would, please have a look at my new write, "desire of a lovely lady'.

[WriterSki7]

Clearly worthy of all the reviews it has gotten. What else can I say?

[Coyote Poetry]

Photo is very beautiful. Your words powerful and told a very good story. Men need time and experience to appreciate the good things. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[salvador (camuel choisu..]

Love it

[Star Wolf]

I think this is very well done.

[Ecros Lathes]

that is a great dream and very nice picture.

[Tina Kline]

Very nicely done. You do write so well.

[Charles]

Done very well with some clever rhyming (like folly and melancholy). As I read along, I got the feeling that there are really two poems here (or themes that blend, but not so well as to be unobtrusive). The first is the poet and 'her. the second is the poet and God. Maybe the fact that one relationship is based on passion and the other on fear (of inadequacy, losing something) is what makes one grate on the other. A good poem (maybe two good poems) with my observation just being something to think about if you are in the mood to refine things at some future time. Write on!

[emma]

This one really got me, so much beauty and sadness intertwined, amazing. I loved it!

[MusicJunkie66]

Your love poems are the best and most beautiful I've ever read in my whole life. I loved it!!!! =)